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for Genjutsu Gone Right

by sandman-nobody

schedule September 12, 2018 at 12:00 AM

wOOt. Update.

schedule June 10, 2018 at 12:00 AM

I love it.

It's a hell of a slow burn, but it looks like we're really getting into it.

I hope to see more soon.

schedule February 5, 2018 at 12:00 AM

I'm impressed at your writing skills, you do so well at capturing the personalities of the characters. I hope the next chapter doesn't take *too* long but you can't rush perfection.

I was hoping we'd have arcs for each girl. For Ino to get as deep into a relationship with Naruto as Sakura did, it's still possible but I fear this could devolve into trying to balance Naruto sleeping with 8 different girls with each barely reaching the level of intimacy Sakura got. Or just boring dime a dozen threesomes. I'm probably jumping the gun here but I've been burned too many times in the past.

Regardless I'll read it anyway because you're a fantastic writer, keep it up!

schedule January 30, 2018 at 12:00 AM

While I am relieved to see that Sakura did not crush Shikamaru balls.It would be most troublesome if he had to eplain to his mother why he can't give her grandchildren. I hope you send in Kurenai to help Naruto.Sure she was going to get back at Kakashi for siccing Naruto on her.I think she would rethink that if she found out that Naruto was able to cast the genjutsu over Kakashi.The blow to his ego jonin taken by genin using a simple genjutsu.Then for them to have a what the fuck did they do moment.After all Naruto would keep working at until he got it.He probably can not tell between his chakra and the Kyuubi chakra. If Jiraya or the Third might ask who supvirsed Naruto training.

schedule December 7, 2017 at 12:00 AM

Great writing! You nailed down the characters' vanilla personalities perfectly, and the story has a really interesting combination of both charm and wrongness.

Anyways, I was really disappointed to hear that some of your reviewers have such an egregious sense of entitlement, so I created an account to let you know that I really enjoy your writing and appreciate the time you put into posting them here. 

schedule December 3, 2017 at 12:00 AM

awesome story

person Euros
schedule November 22, 2017 at 12:00 AM

If fanfiction could actually be published and sold, you'd be one very rich author SSH

 

why won't you bastards review this??? Top five fics on the site imo

person zeek17
schedule June 2, 2017 at 12:00 AM

Well, it might be a bit late, but you have my trust.Your fic is among very few Naruto smuts I genuinely like.

Don't expect many reviews from me, through. I really don't like this site.

person Fapman
schedule March 29, 2017 at 12:00 AM

Great story. Love the inclusion of Ino and cannot wait to see where that goes.
Not much else to say.... I hope the update is coming along well, and i cant wait to read it

schedule March 18, 2017 at 12:00 AM

Another great chapter. Can't remember if I reviewed the last one but can't wait for the next one. I would recommend looking over past chapters for mistakes though