Great chapter, when Takako gets a blowjob he can start his way towards dominating Kushina by holding her head so he cums in her mouth.
Ignore the flaming Anons, it's hig seson for flaming trolls now.
Only thing i don't understand is how Naruto can juse Kuramas chakra when he is seald in Kushina?
great chapter lust looking forward to chapter 8
Grammar could really use work. Like, a lot of work. But if English isn't your first language, that's totally fine. Your idea isn't revolutionary either, but there's really nothing wrong with that too. You could work on toning the whole 'worshipping of the other male characters to bring Naruto and Minato down as characters' down a notch though.
But hey, it's a Kushina story and that's good enough for me really. But keep at it, and try to make more Kushina-centric stories. I'd love to see more, if possible, original ideas.
dude write an actual sex scene 7 chapters in and the most we see is a BJ
BitterNTR just proved my point imagine if the shoe was on the other foot if all you sasuke and kiba fanboys out there could only read nothing but whore tsume and mikoto stories every single day where your favourite characters were downgraded to stupidly absurd proportions just for a netorare excuse pretty sure you would rage just as hard as the very few it seems naruto fanboys out there trolling season lol where i haven't heard that one before (rolls eyes).
While I'm not a fan of adultery, or similar themes in general, this fic is still kinda hot.
Most of that has to do with Kushina knowing what she wants and taking it. That's hot. This can still easily go the way of 99% of the fics in these categories where the woman in question is a braindead cum bucket, a mindless slave in every way that matters.
That's not hot.
Example in this chapter being the scene with Anko. She could have taken up her offer to join her and her fuck buddy, in which it can go one of two ways; they go to Anko's apartment together, fuck this guy's brains out, and turf him when they're done (hot), or they go back and basically turn into wailing banshees, getting degraded and dominated while fucking (not hot).
That's just my personal preference though. I like a woman protag in my smut who's sexy in her power.
Make sense? I dunno. That's pretty high praise from me though, given, as I said, how annoying and how much of a turn off I find cuckoldry.
you know what i'm going to say already right and just voice what the other's are thinking in the time i've been on adultfanfiction forced to read up on whore kushina stories cause i don't know mayby if there was a whore mikoto story where she acted like a fucking slut and had naruto fuck her infront of sasuke, fugaku and itachi (with there powers sealed and dicks shortened to the size of a twig) there would be world war 3 raging on this site oh and for your naruto bashing technique by the way its so damn retarded in the time i've read naruto bashing porn stories on this site (too many to count) there are two types of bashing there is the smart naruto bashing and what you just displayed in this chater as dumb naruto bashing i mean you didn't even put up a disclaimer at the heading you just wanted some lame excuse to have naruto knocked out so your main booy kiba can fuck his mom over him while gloating typical.
Your story is stupid AF.
You Sir are a genuis when it comes to write a slutty Kushina story!
Thank you for staying with Kushinas Team, seeing them pushing her is simply the Best.^^
Again I have to praise you for the well paced teasing space of the fiction, it makes the actual action very special.
Was it a mistake or intentional that Kiba called Kushina by her first name without sensei?
Poor Takako, I for myself are fully supporting his fetish. ;-)
Keep up the great work!
P.S. Please please please update soon! Now that I see that the story hasn't lost it touch I can't wait to see more.
Okay I just read these unqualified rewies (mostly done by anonym accounts of course).
Please don't let it drag you down. They define everything as Naruto bashing when he is not an Overpowered godlike beeing with a mass Harem. They just criticise that the story is different then the other 99% on this site.
In my opinion Naruto was NOT bashed. He was shown as strong, it was just so that Kiba was better. Further I think it was said that Naruto (in this world) was more or less an average Shinobi.
Some reviews seem to compare the Plot of the story with the actual Manga, really guys? You do know that this is a FANFICTION???
Thinking of that, have you really read the manga? Naruto is shown as arrogant and he had quite the harsh conflict with Kiba. Put this fact in context with the background info of this story and it makes perfekt sense! Of course Kiba would like to humiliate naruto by having sex with Kushina in front of him, it was shown early that this was a fetish of him. This hospital scene was greatly written!
Further you can't say it is bullshit that Minato stopped Naruto, in the Manga he was not there when Gara was letting loose so don't just assume he would do as the third Hokage. Again it is the authors decision, you can disagree with it but do it in the context of this story and not the actual manga. Normally I prefer Naruto centric stories too, but you have to give the author a chance!
@LordOfLust: Sorry, most of this review was for the other reviewers. Critic is fine, I just can't stand it when it is just about the story not beeing like all the others on the site. Please keep up the good work, I would hate to see a creative author with good writting and grammar (which is unfortunately rare by adult fanfcitions) quit because of some Naruto fanboys.