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Ending seemed abrupt

great chapter

Is it possible to include Shion into this?  I can see this being one of the more 'troublesome' issue to cover up.

is there any chance for a naruto x kushina plese. its pretty hard to find well made lemons for those stories

great story

I have no idea how to say this aside from.... This is a great story. I doubt there would be anything I would do to change this. Except maybe add tsunade, kurunai (probably spelled that wrong), and anko as naruto's mates too.

interesting story

great chapter

It's quite an exciting story you're writing.Of course the idea is hardly original (there are many Naruto/harem stories out there), but I t's very well written and you managed to put an interesting spin on it.The grammar is also quite good, which is somewhat of a rarity in smut stories these days.I'm also pleased that the second chapter was a lot longer than the first one, because originally I wasn't going to read the story due to its short chapters. While the story is quite good at the moment I do have some concerns:Girls brake too quickly.It's enjoyable to read a story when a dom gradually breaks a sub, and it doesn't happen in a heartbeat.The fact that it's basically enough for a character to snap his/her fingers to make a girl and obedient pet takes all the magic away.I fear that as the story progresses, it will get very repetitive.Of course you might spice up the sex scenes and make THEM exciting and new each time, but there's only so much you can do, only so much holes you can fill with dick in different ways. But needless to say I want you to prove me wrong .I really enjoy the story so far and hope you continue it. Thank you and good luck.

Very good chapter. Kyubi, you are The Fox. Haha And this is the first of many to fall. Waiting for the continuation.