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person Anonymous
schedule January 24, 2017 at 12:00 AM

Love the story so far, but I would love to hear the story of Naruto's sister's first time, especially if it was with Minato.

schedule January 20, 2017 at 12:00 AM

Great chapter 

schedule January 19, 2017 at 12:00 AM

Goddamn that was awesome.

person Guest
schedule January 16, 2017 at 12:00 AM

I like the use of Juvia's water-body and how jizz corrupted her.

Any chance of a Natsu-centered story? I like your story, I'm just a little sick off the 'Naruto-is-everyone's-goldenchild' cliche.

person Anonymous
schedule January 14, 2017 at 12:00 AM

Sorry for reviewing without paying close attention to Juvia's lineage, which was mentioned in this story.

schedule January 10, 2017 at 12:00 AM

I hope Natsu and Naruto tagteam Lucy that would just be awesome.

schedule January 9, 2017 at 12:00 AM

Amazing story 

person Anonymous
schedule January 8, 2017 at 12:00 AM
person CPF
schedule January 8, 2017 at 12:00 AM

Well, do you  think you'd be able to ever get on it or if you could give the idea to an author you really like. 

person Anonymous
schedule January 8, 2017 at 12:00 AM

I'm not a fan of men (or boys) fighting over who gets a girl because it should be the girl's choice. Not that I consider this story a guide to ethical behavior. I'm still eager to see what happens though.

 

I'm a little surprised that Juvia's sir name isn't Hōzuki in this story because the in Naruto canon, the Suika no Jutsu is a Hōzuki clan Hiden. Although there are out of story reasons like making readers that didn't realize who she is be able to look her up and not come to the conclusion she is an OC. And of course this doesn't take place in the exact same setting as Naruto, so maybe it isn't a Hiden in it. Or maybe it is and she still got her hands on it without being a Hōzuki. Considering clans don't write Hiden down in canon, in canon she wouldn't have been able to simply sneak inside a building and steal a scroll that has the instructions.