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schedule October 30, 2016 at 12:00 AM

I can't wait for Naruto to wreck Ino and Sakura.

person stads
schedule October 30, 2016 at 12:00 AM

nice story so far looking forward to naruto futher adventure's and the fun he can find in the dungeons

person Anonymous
schedule September 27, 2016 at 12:00 AM

(This is only about chapter 2)
I'm wondering why Albedo got pregnant considering succubi in this story need to want to get pregnant with all their heart in order to do so, and that the servants were trained to not give into temptation to getting pregnant from Naruto. I paraphrased the wording about the temptation, but it'd be weird if they were allowed to be impregnated by Naruto unless Naruto actively wanted to produce a child. Similarly why can't Kushina have sexual intercourse with Naruto getting pregnant if there is the 'can only get pregnant if the succubus wants to' thing? Does 'Uzumaki fertility' override that? Is the mechanism that prevents pregnancy purely emotional and not cerebral thing (and Kushina doesn't trust her control on her emotions)?

person Anonymous
schedule September 21, 2016 at 12:00 AM

Going on the bloodline and eyes thing again. Maybe Hinata still has the distinctive Byakugan, but the eyes arn't considered distinctive because some non humans might eyes that look similar (perhaps angels, since that is what Naruto thought she was). Naruto probably has the most experience around the 3 lust creatures from where he lives so maybe fallen angels or something has those eyes.

In canon Himawari has access to the Byakugan, but her eyes look normal human eyes because Kishimoto forgot to make them look like HyÅ«ga eyes. However Himawari's Byakugan looks like other Byakugans when it's active.

person Patrick
schedule September 14, 2016 at 12:00 AM

You might not be into this, but any chance of a futaNaruko scene?

schedule September 13, 2016 at 12:00 AM

Great chapter 

person Anonymous
schedule September 13, 2016 at 12:00 AM

Continueing on the bloodline thing from my earlier review.
I noticed there was something similar to lines of bloodlines in humans in what I assume is both the 'old reality' and the past, that being the Uzumaki having long lives and powerful life-force. I don't think that is quite the same as something explicitly refered to as a bloodline limit in canon.

schedule September 12, 2016 at 12:00 AM

Damn that was awesome.

schedule September 12, 2016 at 12:00 AM

Great story and great lemons 

Could you do some lemons between minato and his daughters that would be hot.

person Anonymous
schedule September 12, 2016 at 12:00 AM

I noticed HyÅ«ga's in this story have distinctive hair, because Minato told us. In canon, their most distinctive feature is probably their eyes, which not only looks different than typical human eyes, but is part of a Dōjutsu. The fact you failed to mention her eyes entirely and how different this setting is from canon, makes me suspect she has typical human eyes. It also makes me wonder if there is any sort of Bloodline Limits (in a more canon sense than being a fallen angel or yuki-onna or something). Also I'm wondering if in this setting Bijuu and Jinchuriki are still a thing.

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Please don't respond to this review part of the review: I suspect Hinata is going to have a unique relationship with Naruto as her introduction and Naruto's reaction to her seemed different. And by unique, I don't mean "she's the only girl he doesn't fuck". I suspect she'll becomes his wife or something.