A great story so far! Great descriptions and pacing.A very interesting plot twist with Kurama, I'm eager to know where're you going to take it.
I would really like a Kushina chapter.You know, about how she sissified Minato and got Kiba as her Bull.Maybe you could tell it in a series of flashbacks. I would also really like to see Ino.In this story or in another one like this, written by you.There's no Ino NTR/Cuckolding stories out there, and those are my two favorite things when it comes to Naruto fanfiction. I think you're one of the only people who could do it justice.
Needless to say, I really enjoy your work and hope this story is just a beginning of your path as an NTR writer. Thank you and good luck.
Is it wrong to want to see Hinata get into the seal and beat the crap out of the fox to make it her bitch??? Out of curiousity, how different would Naruto have been if the fox hadn't messed with him? And Naruto definitely deserves a cuddle session with Hinata after that revelation, maybe have him give her and Konohamaru a fashion show and pick out some outfits Naruto would want to wear????
You have the opportunity to do an original thing with this history, with the last revelations you have the opportunity to make an interesting twist in the story and so get out of the comfort of an argument that writes itself.
You can make a a interesting alliance between Naruto and Kyuubi, and that does not mean you can not keep making the argument Sissification or Crossdressing, but the minimum is to try to write some kind of revenge against Kushina by indirectly lead to this situation.
You can make a more original history that most people who write here only with a simple change of argument.
Seriously consider this option, please
it is well known what going to happen, the only plot twist i with you could handle to write thought i doubt it is naruto somehow manipulating the seal and changing it to his gain
With youki he could rebuild his "stuff" and strike back!
Though i know you will continue this flat as sakura story and go forward with this well known plot :/
1st i was forced to waste time making a account to say your story is still trash
Boredom
Not gonna lie, I'm only following this story to see slutty Hinata and Kushina, cringing and hurriedly skimming the Naruto cuckoldry stuff. It's one thing if that genuinely turns somebody on, but you've got him being blackmailed into it and clearly depressed - and none of it is even 'true', given the most recent revelations.
It would be pretty fucking awesome, assuming Naruto really wanted out, if he made a deal with the Kyuubi to get at his hilariously abusive mother back in some way. A reverse cuckoldry, if you will.
Or maybe you just want to torture/mind break/ntr Naruto. I dunno. Not my thing though.
This whole thing is trash.
I'm sorry, but there is literally no other word adequate enough to describe this disaster that you actually dare to call a story.
First off, there's the swift transition between what characters want and how they act, simply to suit your own twisted narrative. None of this is believable in the slightest. Naruto, who has hated what his father had become, who even hated his mother for doing that to his father, is suddenly a-ok with what Hinata tells him about in the 2nd chapter? No. That simply does not make any sense.
Then there's these last two chapters. Absolutely abominable. Repulsive, even.
Why are you writing? I'm genuinely curious. You have no talent whatsoever, the theme of this smutfic is disgusting, the person who requested the challenge even more so, so I'm really curious what exactly drives you on at the end of the day, to further pollute this site with drivel.
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