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for Normality-Naruto

by animehentaiworks

schedule December 10, 2016 at 12:00 AM

I think kusi and tsnade just because they know what they are doing in bed and if he can sastifiy them then he can sastifiy anyone

person C_Wade
schedule December 10, 2016 at 12:00 AM

Hey mate, congrats on writing your first fic!

I'm quite a fan of NTR and MC stories, so it's cool to see you combine those two.

For the next girl(s) I would really like to see Kushina (she's my fav) and/or Ino.

 Two things I'm not all that fond of however, I know you said you're writing this story on your phone, but still, maybe try using a spell checker? There are a few available for mobile (and free).

Second, but maybe that's just me, the 'Dialog Name Tags'. Naruto: ..., Hinata: ... etc. I personally prefer a more 'immersive' style. Hinata said ..., ... shouted Naruto and so on. But that's just personal preference I guess.

Still, I can't wait for the next chapter!

person Anonymous
schedule December 10, 2016 at 12:00 AM

Himawari next