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for The Lone Wanderer

by BigE2955

schedule May 8, 2017 at 12:00 AM

 You're just too quick. By the time I get to check to see if there's a new chapter, there seems to be two or three. Sorry for not having the time to review them all. 

 All in all, a good chapter with a nice throwback to an earlier time. A lot of people tend to forget the early years when writing stories like this. 

schedule May 8, 2017 at 12:00 AM

 So now we get more towards the crux of the plot. Now I believe my most interesting thought is in what order the next few women will be in. As in, who gets pregnant next. 

 As I've come to expect, you do not disappoint. I'm glad to see that you were still maintaining a high level of quality as well as a very fast update schedule.  Congratulations on having almost as many views as many much longer established stories. 

person ElChapo
schedule May 8, 2017 at 12:00 AM

Nice chapter. New to this fic here and it's pretty solid so far especially with the lack of Sasuke fics. I did enjoy the crossover chapters and I honestly wouldn't mind if you added in a few more characters from other series. Not too many but just a few. 

person SxR
schedule May 7, 2017 at 12:00 AM

This is the first time I comment.

I'm really impressed by the speed and quality with which you write. I really like the fact that you add Rias to the story, you know it's hard to find stories of this kind and quality about Sasuke but it's even harder to find stories in which Sasuke interacts with characters from other series, so I really hope to see more Of Rias.

Well I really like the story. I really can't wait to see the next chapter.

schedule May 6, 2017 at 12:00 AM

it was a very good chapter. thank you. rias is an easily attractive crossover character. 

schedule May 6, 2017 at 12:00 AM

Stick to what I said before. Variety is good, but I'd not recommend throwing in out of universe characters too often, or it ends up as an excuse to substitute originality for variety. I say personally that I prefer the former to the latter.

Otherwise, another good chapter. Keep it up!

schedule May 5, 2017 at 12:00 AM

Chapter 16 has copied itself. Where there is the chapter and then it appears again. I don't know the words to explain it but you should check it out.

schedule May 5, 2017 at 12:00 AM

Good chapter.

I didn't expect to see TenTen so soon, in fact I forgot she even existed. Still, nice to see attention to detail and a more comprehensive grasp of the females available.

schedule May 5, 2017 at 12:00 AM

I see Rias won the poll. I'm a little sad, since I voted for Rangiku:(

Still, it's a nice change of pace from the focus exclusively on Naruto characters, though I wouldn't recommend it too often. Perhaps 1 in 10 chapters?

Regardless, thanks for another good chapter and here's hoping for more.

(Thumbs Up)

John

schedule May 5, 2017 at 12:00 AM

I had to actually google her to see who she was 

overall great chapter and I wonder how you going to carry on the story from here