I don't know what it is. I don't even really like Tsunade but for some reason when you do it I'm left craving. I'm searching for the mythical dere and crying from the tsun.
As usual, best girl Naruko steals the show. I'd caution against having more than say two girls in a single chapter because Samui and Ino both felt like side shows even though this was also supposed to be Ino's proper introduction.
Was glad to see proper Anko action. She gets top marks for kinky. And speaking of kink, I had the thought about maybe branching out in fetishes a bit more on the second round through. Maybe through in some proper BDSM, or exhibitionism, or pet play.
For girl Naruko would get top points.
As usual, best girl Naruko steals the show. I'd caution against having more than say two girls in a single chapter because Samui and Ino both felt like side shows even though this was also supposed to be Ino's proper introduction.
Was glad to see proper Anko action. She gets top marks for kinky. And speaking of kink, I had the thought about maybe branching out in fetishes a bit more on the second round through. Maybe through in some proper BDSM, or exhibitionism, or pet play.
Fox girl Naruko would get top points.
Call this a quibble but where my flat chested girls at? Everyone is always shapely with large tits. We need lithe waifus now.
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Finally getting some dere from Tsunade as well. She always seems to resent Sasuke so it's hard to get into the scenes as compared to the other girls..
Hana and Tsume aren't really for me, but to each their own. They reminded me of Kiba though, which makes me wonder about the rewrite. Assuming Kiba isn't genderbent and thotted wouldn't there be some drama fallout from Sasuke fucking both his sister and his mom? I don't mean you have to make him a cuck, but accounting for the feelings of other characters like that would improve plot in the rewrite. Thoughts?
The first few times I didn't care for thus chapter because we've seen the Kumo girls quite a bit in comparison to everybody else. Especially Samui. Hinata is also such a basic common waifu that it's hard to get excited for smut about her.
But it's a case if hidden gems I suppose. I hadn't noticed it the first few times but I really appreciate Hinata's internal perception of Naruko and Sasuke's relationship. It paints her almost as a masochistic cuckqueen voyeur and is something that would be interesting to see expanded on in the remaster.
Even the Kumo girls were enjoyable this time though, especially Karui showing some of that old fire and getting promptly taken control of. The admission of belonging is always noice to see.
This made me think of a possible point for the remaster. Sasuke here just seduces TenTen without a second thought. What if he does that with some girl in the remaster and she's NOT on birth control?
I think that I lacked appreciation for this chapter because I experienced it solely within the context of reading the series from basically start to finish. BEST GIRL RIAS didn't really seem to get treated all that differently from anyone else, so I felt underwhelmed and only really noticed the things the scene didn't have.
Approaching it this time with a more open and less stressed mind I suppose, I find myself with a new appreciation for this. All the little details came together to paint a very good portrait of Rias. We get her initial arrogance and a portrayal of strength, which proceeds to her general good nature and inexperience with the reality of hard living. I actually loved the note about how she tries to help him set up camp but because she's not sure what to do her fumbling makes it take longer. A lovely little flaw that makes her feel more real.
And of course, the lewds. It was a great scene all around and I can notice the development you've undergone from the first chapter to the current one. Also my own biases of course. Had a good laugh at that offhand comment about how much smaller Issei is. You captured her adventurism combined with inexperience, so we know what Rias wants and see she's willing to explore but also get that note of her note quite managing to hold it together like a more experienced girl would.
Then that bit about Sasuke deciding to claim her. Triggers my gud feels. My personal preference is male power dynamics in smut and a determination to claim amd conquer uncharted territory and preventing any other man from getting involved. Sasuke's claim was thus exactly my ideal.
Sasuke, you must protecc Rias' smile >:[.
That aside, I think this chapter - while I disliked Rias as the target of Sasuke's ire - actually does raise a pretty good point. Jealousy on behalf of the various girls has been pretty absent, minus a few minor bits between the Kumo trio that one time. In the Remaster I think I'd like to see jealousy on behalf of those girls who have upgraded to real romantic affection. I doubt someone like Anko would care that Sasuke is running around building a harem, but once Naruko realizes she likes Sasuke I doubt she'd see it as being entirely kosher. A lot of potential with this plotline I think.
As for Rias in particular, I don't know what to say. On the one hand she comes from a society that institutionalizes harems. So she's not going to attack on grounds of fidelity. If you want to keep this situation similar in th Remaster you can make it more lore friendly by basing the conflict in Rias' jealousy. Canonically she doesn't like it when Issei chases after other girls even if she rationally accepts it, so some hostility on her part without her outright telling Sasuke he's 'her boyfriend' or something similar could achieve the same end.