GG on the breeding boy. Glad to see that you're stepping it up (as you should).
I actually found this to be one of the better chapters. The Naruto/Naruko focus is what gets it. Don't get me wrong, you write well in general, but we've already basically gone full circle with Hinata and Himewari. Naruko and Sarada are where it's at if your're trying to keep things fresh and lay down some pornplot.
You've started the ball rolling on Naruto's feminization, foreshadowing it via loss in the spars. Naruto wants to be dominated, and we're starting to see that. I think you'll be able to do really well with this character arc.
If there's one thing though that I feel this fic lacks, it's emotional intimacy. All these girls love Sasuke's cock, but we don't really see any of them interacting in a romantic way. And I think that if you want to improve the quality in general you should step it up on this side of things.
Hell, if you really started working wtih emotional intimacy and justifying these girls as in love with Sasuke rather than just the sex, you could reinvigorate everyone's character arcs. We've already seen Hinata getting broken from Naruto's loyal wife to depraved cumslut. You can't take it much further there. But you could build her back up by creating a second arc that involves her actually coming to love Sasuke.
More fluff, if you will.
I really can not wait for the next one ...this is so ...tabboo. I need to know happens next hurry up with next one please
like how nasty Naruko was to Naruto when he entered her lol good job on this
Took me by surprise when hina said she loved sasuke. Naruto's thoughts on that next time ?
I really hope Hinata has a boy and he looks exactly like his father. This is fucking kinky as fuck …
Missionary is the sexiest position for a bull. Why you ask ? Maybe its the explicit way a women opens her legs allowing a man to take her or the way her hands move across her lovers body anyhoot you know what mean haha . Update faster please !
I'm stopping reading this story. I read so far because of my curiosity. You said in Chapter 1 that you do not hate Naruto, I do not believe it. Okay, it's his fetish being cuckold, but now he turns into Naruko to have sex with Sasuke? Naruto for plot reasons is getting weaker? Sasuke in the Valley of the End needed all the Bijuus to hit Naruto, and even then he was still tied with it. And he told Naruto to stop holding himself. There was no chance for Sasuke in that fight. And now he can not take a punch in the stomach? Bullshit. I knew you would do this during the course of the story, but I did not want to believe it. Now does Hinata love Sasuke? Even being just a fetish of her and Naruto? I'm stopping here, you write good Hentai, but you're a lousy plot writer. Just another Sasuke fanboy like many others. PS: I do not like Sasuke being Cuckolded either.
That was some awesome smut!
I especially enjoy the way you keep the characters working. Sasuke is an arrogant SOB, and it just works for the story.
I laughed at Naruko thinking Naruto was fingering her. That was hilarious. And it seemed she was being generous when she said two fingers lol.
I am curious to see what Sakura does when she learns what's been going on. Especially three Uchiha babies that aren't hers.
Okay this was a great chapter but l also feel like you could have worded it better ,added some intamacy even though it was 8000 words the best parts seemed rushed. A lot of big things did happen though. Naruto lost to Sasuke in a spar on purpose to feel dominated. Naruko was impregnated along with his beautiful wife. Hinata told Sasuke she loved him for the first time. Naruto has dove deeper than ever into s fetish and wait to read more.
U the man !!! Now I wait impaciently for the next episode ...