Can Naruto use yin and yang chakra to solidify his clone so he does not have to henge on his own anymore. He can watch it all and finger jerk.
You the best write more
The girls should get in on humiliatiing naruchan.
Hinata is always sexier when she has indigo curls between her legs. its so much more womanly and mature than clean shaven .She should trim her curls into the shape of the Uchiha fan above her pussy So naruto can always see who her pussy belongs too
this is my fav also lust love and frienship
wow Wow WOW the chapter 16 has become one of my favorites, god I love it from beginning to end, especially the final part, I love that you put the pregnancy to Naruko God I need to see it (or rather read it), I want to see As sasuke impregnates both Hinata and Naruko, I hope you are very specific with that hehehe.
and really hopefully at some point you go to boruto to the family relationship, but you could use a sarada to get him in, I'm sure he is a worthy son of his father and surely has a tiny penis like him and descends to be submitted by an alpha male as sasuke, and surely as his mother, sister and his other mom (naruko), boruto will also have a delicious body when he becomes a woman.
I really need more chapters of this story, I enjoy the family relationship of the Uzumaki and hopefully we get to see the children of Sasuke.
Great Chapter! I am so happy Sasuke will finally impregnate Hinata.
I was waiting for this since chapter one.
Keep up the good work!
you should focus a bit more on the Lesbian aspects even if it's just in terms of while he's fucking them give some lesbian stuff like Hima eating out whoever is getting fucked. Also include Sakura in this eventually an maybe even bring in Ino or TenTen lol
I wasn't attempting to 'prove' anything, you insufferable cunt-scab. It's a review. Where people give you their opinions, whether they're positive or negative.
As far as my grammar goes . . . okay? I'm not the one writing a story. I'm not being held to a higher standard for giving my opinion like you are for writing a story. Even with bad grammar, poor structuring, it doesn't take away from your flaws.
And aside from perhaps "engaging", please point out what words were misused. I'll admit you have a point with my grammar/structure, but I'd love to see what exactly was misused in a fairly straightforward, simply worded review like my own was.
"You have no credibility to call anyone a bad writer." Quit grandstanding. I might not be a writer (this is fucking smut, retard, I don't need credentials or any skill of my own to review your shit; no one does), but I can certainly look at your stories and voice my opinion that your content is hardly all that different from most of the garbage posted to this corner of AFF.net. It's better quality, sure, but just because you're painting over dirt doesn't suddenly leave you or your stories worthy of praise.
Also, please; tell me where I don't get my point across exactly as I intended with the words I used. Aside from the fact that I'm not a fan of yours (and am therefore not using the "Hurr durr, lookit all the Narutards crying" argument as if it has any merit here; you do a disservice to Sasuke as much as you do to Naruto with your writing), I don't particularly see where I left anything to be desired.
Unless you're referring to the fact that I'm unwilling to suck your dick over your bland, second-rate porn. If that's the case (which I'm expecting it might be, you're quick to blast any negative opinion without acknowledging anything they're saying), then you can go fuck whatever fat sow brought you and your overinflated ego into this world.
Give a nobody a review, they're grateful. Give him a 100+, fifty to sixty percent of them positive and suddenly he thinks he's a connoisseur of fiction who's fully capable of proving all of his detractors wrong on the basis of his word alone. Irritating beyond the telling of it.
this chapter was the beggining of a new stage in narutos life . he does not need to transform into naruko any time soon . So he gets to WATCH hhis alter ego and WIFE pregnant with sasukes babies . So Fucking Hot ! I was waiting for hinata to get preggo for a while . you will def knock that chapter out of te park . so many people are going to congratulate them and follow the pregnancy . konoha is gona be ablaze ! Hope hinata wears her wedding dress and naruto records this special moment in the next chapter !