You know, this is probably the ideal relationship for a cuck. In the real world it doesn't work and always goes off the rails, just like it does in this fic. But you've successfullly captured the Halcyon Days sense. Everyone is happy right now without any concern for jealousy or other issues.
" Himawari being tossed around like a sack of potatoes, "
Sexy imagery lul.
I found this a good juxtaposition of the earlier chapter where Naruto was the one getting the texts. They get material with a vastly different intent but react the same way. Naruto - despite being a cuck - is still at this point an active actor.
loved this. You updated alot and never let it fade away like all the other stories.
good ending to a good story!
Of course, a bonus round would never hurt ;D
Tbh, I like the concept of Kurama. Not the rendition.
Good writing as always. You lost me at the 4 year old daughter watching mom and dad get it on though. As a person who has had a 3 year old walk in on me (especially when I had no idea the piece of trash I was fucking left her 3 year old alone in the house to go out party) doesn't sit well with me at all.
As I'm writing this. I've only gotten to that part and not read beyond it yet tbh. I'll give a complete feedback when (if) I'm done with it completely.
Good job on incorporating the tsukoyomi, I think having Naruko be teased and get off Sasuke while not being able to get off herself or not get any sort of pleasure out of it would've been an interesting choice (kind of as a revenge to all Sasuke did for Naruto and the repercussions and risks he took if people would find out)
Hope to see more soon. Good luck
The two pictures I actually connect most with this story:
http://rule34.paheal.net/post/view/635685
http://rule34.paheal.net/post/view/541716
Anyway, great story.
Only thing I was missing was Sasuke making Boruto his disciple in slut-breaking too, ending with Boruto fucking Naruko (as revenge by Sasuke for Naruto making him fuck his little girl).
Love this fic its funny in some weird way.
Just a few idea's. How about having Sasuke permanently seal Naruto as Naruko after he is knocked out as part of his revenge for the whole Sarada thing. You could incorporate it by having Sasuke get Hinata to give him one of Naruto's seals that she knows and use it to seal Naruko in her form permanently. That would deffinatly fit the theme of ntr and betrayal this story seems to be going.
Plus you could have it cause some funny scenes with other characters reacting to Naruko.
Also I agree with the other reviewer. Have Sasuke use Boruto against Naruto as revenge for the whole Sarada thing. Thats kind of an obvious rout for you to include Boruto in this story. Mabey have him somehow knockup Naruko if you permanently seal Naruto as her.
Once again just ideas and suggestions. Cant wait to see were you take it. Hope you keep up the rapid updates.
Loved the SasuSara! More of them please! Maybe Sakura could find out and they have a threesome. Or Sarada could fall pregnant. You know, so Sasuke can resurrect the Uchiha. Oh and make Boruto a cuckold just like his dad and have him watch Sasuke giving it to Sarada.
That no review comment made me laugh haha. I read your update but tbh there really wasn't much happening in the last one so I refrained. I wasn't gonna review on this one as well tbh since Sasuke and Sarada together doesn't really sit well with me.
I know it's because I read a fanfic once in which Hinata dies and an older Sarada takes care of, becomes emotionally attached to and eventually marries Naruto (I think the age gap is 35 to 18 with Sarada being born just after the war). Your idol and admiration comments got me thinking about that and it just got weird.
I like to separate romance and smut into different categories since they're a completely different kind of hard-on (at least to me)
Anyway, good writing even though I don't necessarily agree with the way it's going, it's your story hahaha.
Also, if you'd like to write a romance fluffish story rather than a smut fic maybe ask your viewers for a sensible pairing and we'd go with it. I feel you often try to mix the two together but in my opinion the results have been pretty mediocre so far. Try going over to the fluff side to better distinguish between the two?
Idk. Just rambling. Your updates have surely trickled down but I guess that's life.
Good luck and have fun .
P.S: Tried out kuroinu yet? Maybe insert their scenario's XD.
Also, have you thought about having Kurama as a lead character? Though I respect the anime I feel like they made the Bijuu all about power. Which humans matched with fitness and skill throughout shinobi history. But for beings as old as the Bijuu, as Kurama is he should have found tricks to escape seals, alternate his image and outsmart AND over power mortals.
As I'm writing this, I'm thinking about Kurama sending out a part of his Chakra as an agent to the mortal world before getting sealed. That part of his Chakra adopts a human identity who gains power and knowledge beyond most humans over centuries. That mortal (the name Zero, as in zero tails sounds ironic since Kurama would consider even that beyond the comprehension of most mortals). Anyway, that part of him shows up when Kaguya does and when Minato's Kyuubi, Naruto's Kyuubi and Zero converge they form a single Godly tailed beast with the experience of centuries worth of Nin-Tai and Genjutsu and the accumulated power of all three. Kurama adopts a human form (Gigantic 7 foot tall Man-beast) who then clashes with Kaguya and defeats her takes her as his prize infront of the allied armies and then proceeds to build a temple. Here you could I guess make Naruto and Sasuke female or male but Kurama declared himself the Shogun or Lord of the elemental nations and declares peace out of his love/respect for what Naruto/no taught him.
The elemental nations then send "Priestesses" to gain favour of the Lord and people bring him gifts for his favour. I know yoai ain't your cup of tea, neither is it mine but I guess making him bisexual and dominating men and women equally, offering them gifts and sending them off their way sounds fun.
Maybe even that the males he DOES dominate end up transforming into psudo immortal god's themselves and get sent to each nation as emissaries to both control the populous (preventing further war) and to appease the women once they get addicted to Kurama so that the women and men only make a yearly visit (on Naruto's birthday?) to the shrine of Kurama for their yearly orgy to pay tribute.
Wow. This review is long as shit. Ive been writing this a while now. Anyway. Try poling this idea and see what the people think.
I hope you had your fill from this long ass review though.
Happy writing!