A much better improvement. I noticed you even changed some of the fetishes they had, chanigng Hinata's to enjoying cum in itself. XD
Seeing how Naruto himself noticed how big Sasuke was when they went bathing together was nice, as he himself realized. And I did enjoy how he was even knocking off people he had been thinking off earlier. LOL XD So it's not just me. Everyone things that Shikamaru would likely fall asleep during sex. I think Temari might be the most sexually frustrated girl in the series.
The reactions of them all were nice. Hey, you even took what I said, where Hinata insists that size wasn't what was important. And the little touch where she was ecstatic with how hard Naruto fucked her made her feel great as well was also a nice touch. Pity that sooner or later, she would only know how to feel Sasuke's cock and Naruto can only be a cuckold.
To be honest, I personally dislike that word, but it is what it is here. I look forward to reading a bit more of this. Would even give me ideas for my own fic.
Also, tbh 4 inches is kinda way below average. Maybe go in the it's short and thick while sasuke's is longer instead?
Idk porn logic lol