_ where if Himawari were to have her way, his children would grow. “I lohve you…!” she blurted, her voice hoarse and slurred. “I lohvee you sooo muchhh…!” -
Hohoho. *smirks breederishly*
This is what I wanna see more of breh.
- Eventually, she would have deluded herself, into thinking that she was his wife or something of that sort. It would grow dangerous, to have that sort of obsession. -
God, you just love giving me the feels don't you? Now I feel bad for Himawari. I kind of want to see that. There's something nice about earnest young girls loving a guy that gives me the warm and fuzzies.
- He was sure that Sakura was glad Sarada had only been curious about who her mother was, instead of the circumstances surrounding her conception. -
That conversation would have been lulzy as fuck.
Anyway, I really liked this chapter. It has quite a bit of Sasuke/Hima, laying out the change in her personality and how they interact on a daily basis. Sex slave, personal maid, and eventual breeding cow. Noice.
Also liked the turn in Sasuke. He's not just dark, he's actually showing himself to be pretty fucking clever and methodological about the whole thing.
You know, something that has slowly been growing on me to the point that I feel I have to bring it up is the whole crust factor. You like to talk about how the cum went and dried, or there was crusted pussy juice on Sasuke's dick, or even the other chapter where it was going on about the mush Sasuke's cum turned into. Don't you feel like that's a little... gross?
Coming back to this, I realize that it's an absolute improvement over the original Naruto's Fetish. Yes, there are a few changes to the smut I'd like, but the characterization is much better. Hinata actually doesn't instantly break here, despite enjoying the sex. Drawing the process out makes for better writing, since we get plot with the porn.
Professor Sasuke giving sex lessons just tickles me to death. I can't contain the keks.
Seeing Hinata's slow downfall really drives home for me a few problems. I've had with your other fics. Or perhaps it's not you, but rather the harem genre in general. Cycling through so many girls so quickly really reduces their impact I guess. The development in Hinata over the chapters fleshes her out as a character, and really gives life to the fetish you're invoking.
Will this have a sequal?
I bet Mikoto would be so happy that her youngest son basically destroyed family of her best friend's son. Notice the sarcasm... She must be ashamed of such devil spawn. Oh well, Sasuke is trash no need to even think about it. I mean he did it just because his pathetic superiority/inferiority complex had to be sated. What a petty little man. If you believe even for a second that Naruto would let that happen you're clearly delusional. I guess you have a lot in common with Sasuke. Bitter losers with petty minds.Go ahead a write 10 more Sasuke wanking stories. It's funny how you made him in your stories when he is in fact asexual moody emo with a small dick. You are either his fangirl or a fanboy who never got any pussy in real life. If only there was a filter to ignore stories like this one.
Hey ANON you know how you said you wish there was a filter for fic that you don't like. There is. It's called READ THE DAMN SUMMARY AND IGNORE THE FIC!