It was fucking hot.
Nice story.
I really enjoyed this story, do not worry about negative reviews, I read a lot of great story without comment and even when I do not like a story I just leave it, people leaving hate messages on a story really have a sad life.
I look forward to your next story, a french friend
why is there a pregnacy tag yet no one got knocked up there' no mention at all of anyone getting pregnet yet you said in a previus chapter that it would happen when in our dream cause you did not write it in your story
Wait, where's the obligatory post-credit scene? Did Marvel screw with my mind too much to expect such a thing? :D
Also, very fine ending, just one open question:
For whom were all those sex toys all meant for in the end? Was that even what Sasuke had Naruto help 'set up' from chapter 14? This question is bothering me way more than it should.
So, what fandom or story is next for you?
so basically just like Sasuke you are a sad petty individual who was jealous of Naruto getting everything he worked for in the manga?? How sad. I truly pity you. Well i hope you had your fantasy completed in this trash you call a story.
Hey Anon why dibt you get off your fucking high horse already!?! We get it you like sucking Naruto's dick! Now run along and stop shitting on a good fanfic that wasnt made for you. The guy clearly said this wasn't for peoppe like you so why did you eaven read it? Just so you could bitch and moan? The whole point of a fanfic is that its non-cannon and doesn't effect you enjoying the story. So how about you get off your soap-box and let other people have likes and opinions! Also real mature using ANON as a name. Shows how much of a backbone you have.
Challege 1: AU. The village always comes first no matter what and a ninja, especially a kunochi, must be willing to do anything for their home. Crushes and love interest are luxuries they cannot afford. It was one of the first rules Tobimaru created and Tsunade believes it's time it made a comeback. Especially when it came to Hinata, Sakura, Ino and Naruko(maybe).
Challege 2: AU. Naruto/Naruko and Hinata are captured by Kumo and the couple are slowly brainwashed into becoming breeding stock for the Raikage.
Challege 3: AU. During the Chunin Exams Orochimaru (goodish/rogue) abducts Hinata and trains her to be his ideal weapon/pet.
Love this story so far. Really good and not rushed at all. And to all Anon who whine and complain about this not being a Naruto cock sucking fic grow the hell up. The summery clearly states what this is so stop reading and expecting this to suddemly have Naruto sprout a Two foot long cock and forget his fetish. Not everyone has to worship Naruto like you assholes and pretend he is perfect. Neither is Hinata. And it's not like other fics where shw jumps Sasuke the first time she sees his cock! We see her gradually losing it. So if you don't like stop reading and demanding the writer change! This is theirnfic not yours! You wanna bitch about how the plot goes stop reading or do your own version. Stop acting like a two years old and demand that everyone do things your way.
Damn, just stumbled on this story and I have to this it's absolutely disgusting. I always knew people had fetishes, but man some of you guys are just terrible. A person letting someone fuck not only their wife but their DAUGHTER, who is a CHILD by the way, as well!! Who the fuck likes that type of shit! Feels terrible to when you think that the loser manages to do this. The guy who spent his whole life brooding ends up fucking the actual upright guy's family. I don't understand how people manage to think up fucked up stories like this. I could only imagine what you guys are like in real life. Writing about a guy fucking someone's wife and YOUNG DAUGHTER says a lot about you. Whatever you tell yourself to make this right like Naruto waned it is just pathetic. You guys should look at yourselves in the mirror once in a while.
This comment section is about as toxic as the internet likes to get. Can't understand that at all.
I mean, sure, cuckolding is not my fetish, and I actually hate stories about it. But you bring a lot more into this, including domination vs submission on multiple levels. I liked the original story, and love the remastered one.
The most important fact about the newest chapter is probably that you understand (as does Sasuke, you are controlling him after all) how humiliation only works on someone if they care. That's what so great about those multiple instances in this chapter:
- Naruto coming into Hamawari's room in the first place, getting emotionally involved with her 'boyfriend situation'. Sasuke planned this very well. By making Naruto care about it the humiliation he feels is much greater.
- Immediately afterwards, Hinata being okay with Himawari, even defending that relationship in some way - right after Naruto assumed that Sasuke did something so wrong that Hinata would be on Naruto's side on this.
- And finally, Sasuke 'allowing' Naruto to fuck his own wife, only to wait until Naruto recognizes that this just does not work anymore - and giving him the final blow by taking that privilege away from Naruto before he even came.
- The fact that Naruto has to kiss his cum covered wife to even show basic affections to her is also very well planned and executed by Sasuke / you.
All of that makes the remastered version so much better. The original was basically Sasuke 'accidently' fucking everyone so well in the pussy that they became junkies, even insane in case of Naruko (okay, with time manipulation shenanigans, but still). That was very weird - in a funny way, but more in sense of comic / (cheap) hentai logic. In the remastered version we see that Sasuke is actually intentionally doing this, and doing it by strategically planning and executing every single step.
And while I personally would probably get my ultimate boner if a non-final chapter had kneeling sissy Naruko (no pussy but his small penis) being throat fucked by Sasuke while Hinata was filming it, those are just my own projections.
This story is yours, and the chapters you have written so far definitely show you deserve the narrative trust we all put in you.
Great piece of work.