Great chapter. Can't wait for 11. Hope you introduce Naruko again soon and mabey have Hinata be dominate towards her. Seems like you want to make Sasuke insanely controlling so, you could have him pit Naruto in her Naruko form and Hinata against eachother for his favor and his personal amusement.
Your decent but repititive lemons aside, wat is seriously up with your gary-stu Sasuke..? Can the man do no wrong? Oh woe is me, my "friend" begged me to fuck his hot wife, I really, really didnt wanna do it tho! I'm just as powrful as him (hey, you said it..) so theres no way he can force me to, but I'l still do it. Oh shit, now I got "blackmailed" by his daughter! Curse this ginormous dick I dont want but use at every chance without hesitating! Arghh, I am the victim here!!
And you think your weak, token effort of "oh, he gets punched and talks to ppl and has someone as strong as him" hides the fact that this is gary-stu-ness at its best? your problem isnt that you writing a smut/fetish fic, its the fact that u get heated when ppl point out the holes in this or compare it to the piles of similarl shit OOC-Naruto fics.
also, youve got this weird bashing-but-not-really vibe when it comes to Naruto. Looking at your most recent review replies, u twisted one of his main beliefs of remdeption into him being a limp-dicked cuck? thats what he gets for being too "kind"?
Shit, even among all the stuff I've seen on AFF, this some gold-medal mental gymnastics regarding both charcters. lol, u really runnin with the "fan" part of "fanfiction", huh?
but hey, any review that isnt 2 lines of fluff singin praises on anything u write is just "haters" and "don't mean shit", lol
I understand some of you are dissatisfied with this fanfic. Ive felt like that too. But its free fucking porn. Hes not getting paid or told to do it. If some of you hate it so much why do you keep reading it. Is it just to complain more. Im sure none of you are this pathetic. So if you dont like it, kindly walk away from it and find a better one for you. Thats what i do.
I think some of them are here just for the comments I kno I am
Wouldn't waste even waste your mom cum on this piece of shit ya little bitch don't flatter yourself
I apologize if I came in a little hostile it wasn't meant to come off that way I was just reviewing from what I read honestly I didn't mean to cause any trouble
a Gary Stu doesn't - a. get punched in the nose, b. have someone who's exactly as strong if not stronger than him, and c. confide in other people with their worries over certain things
who are you kidding your sasuke is a Gary Stu it's like the man can do no wrong any bit of conflict is completely washed over with no repercussions "oh he got punched in the face" so what he still comes out on top that alone just screams Gary Stu
Just wondering, will we get Naruko anytime soon?
Hey, how about updating Loveless next?
That was a azing chapter, I loved how you wrote their internal conflicts.