I know I have no real right to ask, but can you please re-write this chapter? There as been such a build up to this moment between Sasuke and Kushina. The little bit written here while interesting, the conclusion of these two seems half-hearted. If you need more time please take it. I just really wish to see a proper teasing, take them both to the edge, desperate conclusion for the culmination of Sasuke and Kushina.
You again? You're still alive? Tch, I thought you got run over by a truck, I was happy when you didn't show your sasgay cock sucking face.. thought you kick the bucket..
Double incest is double the fun. I think this chapter makes me a bit sad though, because it'll be the last we see of Mikoto. Well unless you pull some kind of Rinnegan or incubus shenanigans to allow Mikoto to be reborn. Which would lead to problems of its own with Fugaku - unless you wanted to just cuck him.
Also, I'm not really sure how I feel about your Satsuki. She's a bit of an airhead and feels like a colour swapped Naruko almost. I feel like an opportunity for a real femSasuke/Sasuke was missed.
Now THAT was a blowjob. Loved the details about Itachi practically chewing the thick sticky cum. I'm not much of a blowjob man myself but that was good.
Beyond that this chapter is actually a bit hilarious. Sasuke running around trying to hide his dick and thinking about getting a holster or something was comedy gold. And of course best girl Kushi is a total maneater here, really adds an interesting dynamic between them.
I'll admit I wanted to see Satsuki more than Itachi, but it's still a good read. I would recommend really playing up the incest angle though. I mean don't get me wrong, Fem!Itachi is hot but ultimately she's a thot. I mean - I feel like in order to help differentiate the girls there should be more variety in how they appear. The sex should vary and depending on who it is different fetishes should come to the forefront. Would help keep it fresh. So Kushina would be a MILFy sort of sex where Sasuke eventually breaks her and talks about how he's better than her husband and so forth - almost cuckoldry. And someone like Itachi would be more about the feeling of being fucked and possibly impregnated by her own brother, how filthy and wrong it is but how she just can't stop, and so on.
PS - Where is Shisui what's his story
This chapter was eh? I mean it was well written enough and had some actual events occurring beyond mindless sex. Ino is set up now so that it's not just instant panty drop but actually has a little bit of pornplot behind it. That said, it definitely feels like Satsuki is getting shafted in favour of Itachi. Sasuke/Femtachi isn't common but it's not exactly rare. Sasuke/Satsuki is pretty rare though and I don't think I've even sewn it anywhere else. So it's by far the pairing I'm ore interested in exploring.
I hope that all of Sasuke's moralizing is for naught. Like he tries to be a gud boi but over time his urges take more and more control over him until he has no problem breaking women. Or at least, certain girls. Also I highly suggest you get away from blowjobs. I feel like there are so many blowjobs in this fic and nothing else. Hasn't Sasuke only actually had sex once with each girl minus Kushina so far? Where it's like blowjobs every chapter. And there hasn't been any anal or titjobs either.
THIS IS WHAT I WAS WAITING FOR.
That Sasuke/Satsuki scene was the bomb. It had almost everything I could ask for in terms of smut between them. The force, the incest angle, the conquest and ownership, the dominant/submissive dynamic. Literally the only things I could ask for is breeding, whether in actuality or even just Sasuke fantasizing about one day breeding his sister. That and something from Satsuki's POV to give her emotional perspective on everything.
Reading this chapter and coming to the end of it, I have the feeling that at some point Sasuke should make an explicit ascension to romantic love for his sisters. Based on their character arcs and the story premise it's not like they're going to break it off with him, and since they were first it seems like they should be the first in romance too. You've even set it up in the worldbuilding that incest is very odd but not unheard of in Konoha, so I would like to see at some point Sasuke come to a decision to wife up. His sisters are well on the way to conquest and he's already possessive, so he should eventually make it clear that they're his and that he's never going to let them go. Eventually he'll marry them and any children they have will be his
One of thethe best chapters honestly. Not necessarily in terms of smut but definitely of character development. Sasuke's relationships with both if his sisters has definitely gotten an upgrade in a very strongly implied way. They haven't made any clear declarations about the future but it's still very good. It gives the whole relationship a feel of proper progression. It's a slow fall rather than just a sudden break.
Satsuki really has gotten her time in the spotlight in the last few chapters. Overall I'm very satisfied and want moar.
And then of course there's the hilarious factor of Sasuke basically feeding Naruko his cum in her sleep. It's so filthy and depraved and really illustrates moral corruption in his part more than almost anything else he's done. Bravo