Really like where you went with the story, glad Ino found out about the whole thing. I'd like to see more Sai humiliation or just more of his involvement, but I'm not sure where you want to go with the story, it's up to you. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Also hope you write more stories involving Ino and cuckolding, cause there are not enough of those.
Thank you and good luck, BigE2955
This reminds me strongly of Naruto's Fetish. Of course, that's a given considering it's going to be a cuckfest. But I can't help but wonder about Sai - is it really going to have the same impact considering he's basically borderline autistic? I suppose you could have him just wake up and realize he's getting cucked and then dislike. I suspect that is actually what will happen.
I would suggest going down a different road with it though. Naruto's Fetish is all about consent, and in the end whatever happened Naruto was a partner in it. He could have told Sasuke to stop, but he liked it too much. I'd like it if here Sai wants them to stop but Ino isn't willing to. A true wife theft, rather than a consenting submission.
For this chapter I don't really disagree with what Sasuke was going for, but it just didn't feel like payback. I would have suggested that during the sex and upon giving the facial he was inwardly fuming and degrading her in his mind. It would better convey anger and give the scene more of a revenge feel. The act is here, but not the emotions that should come with it.
Since this is another new story, I wanted to give it a little skim. Anyways, thing is... isn't this pretty much a carbon copy of Naruto's Fetish, only now we have an asexual Sai letting his wife Ino be Sasuke's bitch?
I dunno, it just feels recycled, though least now we have it where Ino thinks its Sai when it's really Sasuke fucking her, so there's no feeling of guilt in her and she's happy as can be, that's for sure. But situations like these can slowly begin to show Sasuke NTR'ing Ino as well. In which case, it would pretty much be the same as Naruto's Fetish.
I recommend doing some unique twists. Like maybe apart from that, show that Sai is slowly rising to his sexual side, and he does and thus comes clean, and Ino still loves him and avoids the NTR flag. I mean, unless we're to erase Inojin's existence.
You probably already have an idea on what to do, so I guess we'll wait and see.
I'm not on his dick Anon. I'm just tired of assholes like you ranting and raving about a fic because it isn't your style. Its a fanfic! If you don't like the idea from the summary don't read it. There is no law thar saus the must read every fanfic.
So, I guess Sasuke stories can't exsist in the Naruto section. It all has to be about one blonde idiot that has hordes of fanboys drooling for his dick. As most fan's of this fandom know, 90% of stories in this section consist of Naruto himself. Why is it that Naruto fanboy's feel so threatened when one or two stories show up with Sasuke as the lead? Is all the Naruto stories in this section so shit, that you all feel the need to have other fans write about him?
LOL.
You all need to get with times and realize that not everyone worships the ground he walks upon like you all do. We all have characters we perfer, and even if they made some bad decisions in the series, we still have the right to like whoever we like. I can go on a triad on how Naruto (the character) is the worst thing to happen to shonen manga, but that isn't what this review section is for.
So if you want some blonde dick sucking, look elsewhere idiots.
Now for the story. I don't really have much to say. The writing in and of itself isn't bad, though I don't care for NTR stories. It'd also be nice if Sasuke's penis wasn't a tree branch. It could be big, just not outrageously so. It makes it seem more like a comedy fic.
Stop Just Stop. Its time to stop polluting the fandom with this cancerous writing. Sasuke is a prime example of a failed character redemption and is not your messiah. Stop disguising thee self insert stories, we know it and you know it. Get better taste for us and yourself. Have a nice day.
Ok I'm not really a fan of most your storys. More content then anything else. Different tastes and all that. How ever you are a good writer, and I love reading the comments for your stories. How someone can such praise and hate for the same stuff greatly tickles my warped sense of humor. What ever your doing keep it up. As long as you enjoy what your doing
@ Y'all Mother Fuckers Need Jesus
I dunno if the author is all the way dick-riding Sasuke into being a OOC self-insert GarryStu...or if he's just trolling the fuck outta everyone, lol. But yeah, the slobbering over Sasuke and the uchiha clan is funny but a little weird (most of his sasuke centrec stories tend to do that). Its like the author can only write douche-sasuke, or occasionally douche-naruto or another guy (basically a pallet swap of his douche-sasuke). Either way, I don't even read the fics no more cause everybody know the formula, Im just here for the reviews and comments, thats where the real action is, lol.
@Papillion and Y'all Mother Fuckers Need Jesus
First off the author isn't gay for Sasuke. Sasuke just fits the role for plots like this better then most. Second why do you assume Sasuke has a tiny dick? That is never brough up in cannon nor is your idea that Naruto is some sex god in bed. People have different tastes and it honestly annoys me how people who dislike something shit on it because its not their favorite and this is more at Y'all Mother Fuckers Need Jesus then you Papillion. Atleast you admit you are only here for comments. But as for you Y'all Mother Fuckers Need Jesus stop acting like you are the final say in what people can write. It's called a FANFIC! That means non-cannon. It doesn't hurt the show in any way. Hell My Little Pony fans are more tollerant of opinions then you. So get off your high horse and act like a reasonable person.