You REALLY need to get a beta, or take some grammer/spelling lessons........................Just saying. It would make your story much more readible.
REMOVE THE CHAPTER NOW!!!! that is utter bullshit you just ruined a perfectly good story just with that utter bullshit
As much as I enjoy this story the numerous spelling errors are kinda ruining it also it’s Kurama not Kurema unless Kurema is an OC of yours
A beta points out and or edits any mistakes they may find while proofreading
still I like this story very much
hot damn, at this rate he'll fuck em all.....this is awesome, but i also hope you won't leave the loli's out get em while they're young they say xD
your storeys not bad but you really need to watch out for missing or transposed letters it is a big distraction.
You really need to get a beta
are you looking for a possible beta for your future stories?
if so then please let me know.
some thing is bugged on your side. it has been five days and the chapter is still not fully up. every time i come to check this story its either cutting in the middle of it, or a few pharagraph are added and then it cuts again. you really should fix it since it has also happend with your other stories.