why would people ask his age after seeing his dick? Is it super wrinkly or something?
Nice
Awesome chapter
can’t wait for more
please continue
yes more lemons please
Nice chapter hope you update soon
The only complaint I have is that the sex scene seemed force to me. Other than that good job
Very nice first time for Hinata. I can't wait to see how long it takes Sakura and Ino to figure out what happened between Naruto and Hinata. But please let Hinata have some time together with Naruto without them joining in! I wouldn't mind Anko teaching her a few tricks to drive Naruto crazy, but let if she could get to be Naruto's sole his age girl until Wave that would let their relationship blossom more.
Excelente capitulo algo corto el lemon pero bueno espero la continuacion pronto
It was a good read. I'm enjoying the fact that you develop the entire team by writing scenes dedicated to the girls outside of team gatherings. Though, you should make an effort to expand the setting further. Show the characters interacting in new, defined places instead of just their homes.
There were a few grammatical errors. During the lemon, it was more noticeable; you would slip into present tense.
Until your next update.
It was a very good chapter, and that means very good for me as I do not like Hinata as a character. I did notice that it seems you were rushing some parts as the spelling errors and tenses changed a bit. However I still love the concept of this story so keep it up!
I loved the chapter when I made the challenge and had Hinata ask Naruto to help her with her stanima though sex as a way to show Hinata's pervertedness but the way you did it was genius 10 out of 10 the only thing left I have to say that ending in the this chapter Naruto's red eye I can't wait to when will you plan to do with it because I don't believe that that is the fox keep up the great work