Freakin awesome
cant wait for more
yes naruto and temari i wonder if they will be more ladies joining the action
he broke temari
Good shit. To be honest, Naruto seems to flicker between being in character and not. From your other works that don't involve him being a massive cuck (because those are trash and you should be ashamed of them) that you've written, you seem to know how to write him normally. So I'm not sure if it's just that the scenes seem a bit unnatural to see an in character Naruto in, or if you're deliberately changing him in those scenes.
Either way, they're a bit off-putting.
I enjoyed Gaara knowing and not caring about Naruto sleeping with Temari, and the ending with Temari starting to become mind-broken was... a thing. I can't say I'm a huge fan of mindbreak, so I hope that not everyone he sleep with becomes nothing more than a cum-thirsty slut with no independence. Being that it's you writing this... I'm honestly not sure whether that's likely or not.
You have a gift. A true writing gift. Not only are you able to write extremely sexy and erotic stories, you are also a very gifted story teller. You manage to avoid all the usual pitfalls that accompany these kind of stories. And say this as a reader of allot of your work. You manage to have found an excellent way to pace your stories. There is a logical and calm progression to the events. It doesn't turn into a smorgashboard of orgasms and liters and liters of cum from the get go. Or a degrading cuckholding unatural fantasy from the first paragraph onwards. No. it's all very evenly paced. It's all very refreshing. And the themes you write about are also very original in their excecution. Your story "lust, love and friendship" is very good example fo that. Most similar stories would find ways to start the degrading and unnatural deameaning actions from the get go. But your story starts with the first simple act of voyeurism/wanting to see your wife get fucked by an other man. It is only in later chapters that the more darker tones and conclusions (wife stealing/turning Naruto into a cum slut himself, etc.) are reached. And that is very unusual for this site.
Another good example of your writing skills is the story "Fuck brothers". Most Naruto fanfictions can be put into two catergories. Naruto is a literal god's gift to women and Sasuke is a patethic weasel not fit enough to be walked upon. Or Sasuke is the true sex god of the universe and Naruto couldn't even get a fish wet. But you managed to write something exciting that encapsulates both of their personalities. While also making them equal in prowess and gifts. Do you know how unusual that is? I can't say that I have ever read something like that! I would love to read more of your work that deals with the characters in a similar evenly paced and original fashion.
Nevertheless you are one of the greats in writing adultfanfiction.
Hey man this was a good story. But it will drown in the sea of thousands of other Naruto harem stories with exactly the same plot. Sex addict and bid dicked Nauto that no kunochi or woman alive can have enough of. And after he's went through everyone, he will go back in the past by some miracle and will bang everyone and their mom's. Or go into the future bang his daughter and Sarada and whichever female. That's the short and long of it. Easy plot and simple too.
I will be honest with you. The Lone Wanderer and Naruto's Fetish will literally always be your magnum opus. Even one of the previous reviewer for this story mentioned The Lone Wanderer. And that's because Lone Wanderer was amazing. It had a fresh face that was not Naruto and a different feel to it. This is a fact. Most importantly a STORY.
I like you and you're one of my favourite authors. And I strongly advice you to focus on your other stories instead of making a new story and updating it a few times before making another one focusing on that instead.
Or give yourself a month of break. You deserve it. You're redears will understand. I'm sorry if I'm criticising. I do feel bad but I just wanted point out. Good Luck sir.
This is fucking great. U must write Naruto more instead of sasugay. i dont knoe why write always sasugay hes emo. everyone noes hes small. Have Naruto have threesome with Mikoto n Sarada that will be hot n sexy. Also kushina. Do more Naruto then more people read youre story. hes the main character also. Noone like sasugay anyway. Do next chapter!!
That’s pretty good so far. I‘m interested in what you will make out of this story
Stop making Naruto harem fanfics. There are already shit load of them out there. Naruto sucks and so do his fanfics. No one wants to read dumb Naruto harem fics.
Interesting story look forward to more
Cool chapter hope you update soon. Would love a Mikoto, Kushina, or Tsunade chapter. More temari would be cool too
This was hot but they shoulda gone a third round with naruto putting it all in and going wild on her.