Well this is becomming more and more interesting. As you said there are allot of stories on this site that can be categorised in one or two very distinct camps. Either it makes Naruto a useless piece of shit that for some almost unexplained reason becomes the most cucked and wimpiest person alive. Or it makes Naruto some kind of sex god that can fuck endless hours, cumming gallons of spunk with a dick that can be used as a flagpole. Both are very predictable and very uninteresting to read.
Very few authors can write in such a way that makes the events somewhat logical or believable. Some manage to write cuck Naruto in a way that makes it somewhat beleivable. ie he gets some sexual pleasure out of it, or he participates himself in some fashion. Not exactly my cup of thee, but still somewhat more interesting to read than without some kind of reason for his disposition. Stories that make Naruto some kind of sex god are often just as predictable. But some manage to slowly build the story up, with a relaxing pace and sensible buildup. Slowly delving into the depravity that Naruto can get into.
As for your story. I know of the original. And I can't wait to see what you make of it. The groundwork is there. The cataslyst for Naruto's depravity if you will. Neglected by his parents, ridiculed by his peers, a chakra being of pure hatred (and whatever 'yami' Naruto is) in his head.That is sure to fuck someone up. I for one can't wai t to see how it all develops. I cant wait to see what drives him to the edge and what the world and it's people look like after Naruto's fall. I can't fucking wait! And thank you for writing it. As far as it looks now. You have a gift. A gift of writing. You manage to keep me capitvated and on the edge of my seat wanting for more. A testament to your writing skills.
with kind regards
good chapter bro
Huh, well wow. This is much better than I thought it would be. Honestly speaking I never thought about adding any sort of time-travel elements to the story, but I can definintely see you MAKING up a reason and causing a time-ripple effect. Oops! I think that might be a spoiler. But good job... PhallicSymbol. Even your name is a wank festival.
Good luck though, cause I was really at my wits end when I finished chapter 1. Lord of Lust if you're reading this, really bro don't mind this, but compared to the amount of holes you were violating in Kushina in your story, you were leaving out more plot holes. Just honest criticism. From what I heard from this guy though, you should give this a read.
That said, the last bit was completely new and threw me way off track. Nice.