Not poorly written, but the cuck thing just isn’t for me
Very good chapter It is an interesting story. I already look forward to see how you develop the plot.
Keep it up.
Excellent start! There are two things I really like about this story that help it avoid the things about cuck/cuckquean stories that usually turn me off.
1. I like the way you characterized the cuckhold (Sasuke here, but applies to all stories like this) as simply not interested and looking out for his wife, rather than bashing and emasulating him. I know some people are into that, but I'm glad you didn't go that route.
2. I LOVE the way you wrote Hinata. Rather than just like a sex trophy as she is often written in these stories to be snatched up by the alpha-male protag, she is the one convincing Naruto to go along with it and taking her turn to be on top during sex even if she still enjoys being submissive to him. Very very hot!
Please write more :)
Nice to see a new fix that's not either yaoi naruto or naruto getting cuckold please keep going