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for The Sacrificed

by Sasunarufan13

person Ookima
schedule August 4, 2020 at 12:00 AM

Kudos to you for Chapter 3! It was very well paced. I relaly love Naruto's innocense but also his determination when he realises something. Sasuke softern side is a really nice touch, his restraint of wanting to take Naruto, yet considering his feelings. I just love it all.

 

The last scene was an excellent touch in all honestly and very different than what I read. I found it to be just perfect way to end the chapter. Thanks agains for the hard work and please do continue :)

person Ookima
schedule July 12, 2020 at 12:00 AM

So happy to find another chapter in just a few days. These really brighten up my day. I really liek the psychological part (the questionning and pace throughout the chapter) sometimes it can feel rushed but it was all just too perfect.

Kudos for the ending of this chapter, it felt perfect, since the wolf even if he was patient, but also hides a lot his emotions. I thoguht it was a perfect reaction to having heard a "yes". Can't wait for the rest of this story. Carry on :)

person Ookima
schedule July 8, 2020 at 12:00 AM

Loved this first chapter! Please do continue your hard work I can't wait to read the next one!