Unfortunately, this is bit why AFF is not very good, I'm not referring to the story, I'm referring to the fact that users cannot directly DM other users. The ideas are not secretive between user and author, which I think the ideas mentioned below should be between the user and the author, not for all of us to see because it spoils the thrill of what could happen, if you already blow your load in the review section. I also think the DM is a more direct approach to speaking with author, you can swap ideas for other stories, who knows you can develop another Kushina fic or a Mikoto fic or essentially any other fic. That's my take, it also helps those who have ideas to start writing stories of their own, when they talknwith an author personally. Just a suggestion, so we don't have long ass paragraphs in the review section, no hate on the previous two comments, but rather how AFF works.
Agreed for the most part, but I don't think spoiler ideas really matter. It would kinda be like saying story tags are spoilers. We know it's a cheating story, we know she wants to get pregnant, and we know she's changing physically and as a character and becoming more open with herself. Reading an idea for a scenario and then actually reading it in the story where the author adds his unique twist and buildup to it are very different. The whole point of feedback and idea sharing is to possibly see changes in the story, but ya I can see why dms are better for ideas. I just don't think any ideas given and then implemented are considered "spoilers" though. We still don't know anything at all about what's coming, the only thing the author "spoiled" for us is that she's getting 1 or 2 tattoos later on, he didn't directly respond to comments either which is great because no one knows what's happening or what to expect, we can only assume! Suggestions given to the author way back as early as the first 2 chapters are just now being implemented in some way and it makes sense considering how far the story and characters have progressed. The overwhelming majority of this story is still the author and his ideas, as it should be. Aside from a handful of specific situations, that I personally think would make for great chapters, a lot of ideas are mainly just building blocks for the author to use. Routines aren't bad by any means, but I suggested things to hopefully change things up so that Kushina and Sasuke aren't just away from each other for days/weeks at a time and then going to the same hotel or his house when his parents aren't there. The only people right now that are suspicious are possibly still Itachi and possibly still Mikoto, although I think she should have relaxed a lot by now especially after Suigetsu covered for him. Neither of them could even think for a second that the woman he's messing with is Kushina! No one on Kushina's side suspects anything, which allows for a lot of freedom and wiggle room which is where some of my ideas come in. If I could directly dm then I for sure would when it comes to most ideas, but I don't think comment length has anything to do with it. Would rather comments be large and detailed rather than short and vague. Nobody could've seen chapter 8 coming and that blew the doors wide open for how far Kushina would go for Sasuke, same for chapter 9. Nobody knew he was gonna start playing with her ass either. Rest assured the author has insane creativity and there's still so many more surprises to come. Most of my bigger ideas and suggestions are already out there in some form or another so I won't be commenting entire pages from here on out lol.
When a new show or IP gets created people don't make theories and "ideas" about what's gonna happen and then when those things DO happen, look back and call them spoilers. Or for a manga say if after chapter 40 someone says there should be a time skip no one looks back and calls that a spoiler when the author does decide to do a timeskip later. Not the greatest analogy but you get what I mean. Similarly this story is ever changing and suggestions and ideas will change accordingly. Valid criticism on the platform though, I wouldn't have written entire paragraphs of ideas and put them in reviews unless I had to lol.
I'm referring to say we see something similar about the gym idea, but we already know how it would end because the idea was given in the comments section. I'm not a full on fan of the idea because I've seen the scenario before in other Sasukushi stories, so it's why I'm not fully interested because it's something I've seen before. When you see something over and over again, you do tend to get bored. It wouldn't surprise me if she does the same thing to Sasuke in an epilogue 20 years down the line because that's also the realism of marriage, you start to have sex less, it would be the same as her marriage with Minato, in the beginning, he was the "perfect" lover and husband, but as time goes on, the spark becomes dull. Which could eventually lead to her going with others, note I said that's a possibility for the future, not the now, adding in Kushina's way of thinking, it can be a possibility, Sasuke could look out for his kids' future and work harder. Could be a consequence, who knows what the author has planned. Once again, I'm not in the present about my comment, I'm thinking of chapter 70 or something. Also when you think about it, the trips idea would begin to make Minato suspicious as well, remember she declined Minato's trip and for her to not take her spouse would begin to make him suspicious after a while, so it could be a way to raise Minato's suspicions, it would also raise Mikoto's suspicions again, otherwise she would have had Itachi follow Sasuke, to be sure that he was actually going to the theater, so not very bright on her part, it shows her gullibleness because if she had done that, the jig is up on the Uchiha side, so something will happen to get her suspicions back, since there was no Itachi appearance. Would not surprise if somewhere down the line, Sasuke leaves his phone behind for them to hack into it.
But that's a suggestion for the author, you wouldn't know that if I had DMed them directly and it does give readers who talk to authors a better understanding of their ideas for the story, but at the same time, the author is not really asking for ideas, just a review on the chapter or as you and the other user put it, the critique of two chapters, which helps them out, but I do think some ideas feel rushed, primarily because they're already having sex and in the realistic aspect, it feels like Kushina is confusing lust for love, when you think about it
Gotta disagree, I don't think Kushina would cheat on Sasuke nor would it happen so late in the future where she's 60 and when nothing core about the story like the ntr or sex scenes matter anymore. Don't think an epilogue that much later in the story is needed but it's way too early to think about that. Author already clarified she won't be passed around, she's sticking with Sasuke only. Now about Minato getting suspicious I don't buy it, he's always working and we've never seen Kushina show an ounce of interest in his work so he probably expected her not to come with him. Kushina then overhearing him talking to a woman and stalking him to the bar should also destroy any thoughts she had that Minato was unfaithful, it was made clear that Minato is married to his work. Suspension of disbelief is necessary otherwise stories like this and fanfics in general wouldn't exist outside their source materials. We've never once seen Minato get suspicious and frankly, one small thing as simple as not going on a trip with him shouldn't suddenly trigger or bother him at all, it would be forgotten by the time Kushina started going on trips with Sasuke. Similarly with Mikoto and Itachi, it's been months since the ASSUMPTION from Itachi that Sasuke was messing with a married woman. Mikoto seemed more bothered than him, but again it's been months now and there's been nothing to trigger her suspicions, rather the call from Suigetsu should be a sigh of relief for her and get her off Sasuke's back for a while. She already thanked Kushina for getting through to Sasuke and probably mentally thanks her for keeping Sasuke away from trouble, she suspects NOTHING between the 2 of them. Nothing you've suggested regarding further suspicions on the behalf of Minato and Mikoto are directly supported by the story at this time, rather the opposite like I've mentioned. They also wouldn't immediately get suspicious after their first few trips either, it's not like Kushina and Sasuke would always go together. As an alibi Kushina could probably go out of town for a night or two and have Sasuke stay home so nobody suspects anything. They'll keep doing this for a bit while also secretly meeting up on other trips so that nobody would be suspicious for a quite a long time. Naruto and Minato getting a bit weirded out by Kushina's new wardrobe isn't cause for suspicion, the author even directly stated it when Sasuke hugged her in front of Naruto. A woman is going to the gym seriously for the first time in years and completely transformed her body, their first thought should be happiness that she found a way to keep herself busy and healthy. They probably think it's her way of fighting off old age and a midlife crisis. Of course eventually some family members would get suspicious of their trips, especially when they find out that their schedules magically align most of the times when they go out, but they haven't even been on ONE fucking trip yet, let them have their fun while no one suspects anything. Also no way are the Uchihas gonna randomly hack Sasuke's phone when it's laying around lmao, hacking won't even necessary by the time they ACTUALLY get suspicious. If anything Kushina and Sasuke in the future would get careless and start slipping up here and there, maybe they'll see her as his wallpaper or some of their regular texts when it comes to that point.
The author never explicitly asked for ideas but anyone is welcome to try and give feedback in the context of what kind of story this is and what it's shaping up to be. I would've never made my suggestions if Kushina didn't become so bold in chapter 8, the story is what the story becomes as long as the progression makes sense which it does. Just irks me when people spend time saying "this story is not for me" because it's not productive. Indirectly these people are either saying "bye" which is fine, or they're demanding changes that would change the entire nature of the story. I keep getting the feeling you're thinking way too critically and "realistically" at times when its clear the direction the story is going. The story wouldve never made it anywhere where it's at now if we were strictly being "realistic", again suspension of disbelief is key here. No, Kushina ain't confusing lust for love. She calls Sasuke her boyfriend, made and continues to make so many changes FOR HIM, and wants his fucking baby. If she strictly wanted sex and keep him at distance that would've been established and cleared many chapters ago. Would literally make no sense for her to distance herself now, she's only falling deeper lol. She clearly said Sasuke's makes her feel things she's never felt before and that he reaches places Minato never could, she didn't how good sex or a boyfriend could be until she met Sasuke, it's not a fling anymore, it's serious. I don't see how some ideas seem rushed, are you talking about the ideas NOW currently in the story or ideas for the future? Because either way, nothing's being rushed lol, would you rather read 10 more chapters of them sneaking away into a hotel room once in a while, with Mikoto still being paranoid MONTHS later? You said it yourself we need to see something else because the same stuff gets old eventually. Slowing down from this point makes no sense, especially when nobody is suspicious of them being together, literally nobody. It's actually the best fucking time to speed things up a bit, I've always treated chapter 8-9 as the introduction of a new "arc" in the story. Previous chapters were build up, then their relationship changes and becomes more serious, now some suspicion is off their back and they should get a few months to have a lot of time together while no one is on their case. I truly don't see the need or desire to regress the story, literally what would that even achieve? Let them have their fun for now and later they'll inevitably start slipping up and we can enter into actual suspicion from their families. All this is up to author at the end of the day but I think them having their fun for a while and slipping up later is a good way to cast actual suspicion onto them when the time comes. However they've been quite tame for a while now and playing it safe because of Mikoto which is why I was suggesting they ramp things up just a little bit now that Mikoto is calming down and with Kushina getting hornier and hornier, her sex toys aren't enough for her anymore, she needs higher thrills.
I think you just look for things to argue, I already stated why it wouldn't surprise me, based on how she descripted her early stages with Minato, it seems similar to Sasuke, it's all "perfect" and all, but you never know and neither do I, after the divorce or how many babies they have, Sasuke could start acting like Minato is now and it's literally back to square one all over again for Kushina, not saying she gets passed around, she just goes for a "new" Sasuke. Never know what could happen, can't directly communicate with the author to know his or her ideas. I'm just going off Kushina's thought process on when she was comparing the two. As for the hacking thing, ever heard the saying about curiosity, it would make Mikoto wonder who was the married that Sasuke was messing with. I see the gym thing as something in BitterNTR's Kushina Sex-ventures series, who does help this author, I believe. Now I do agree that they could start slipping up as you mentioned on the trips, it would be suspicious after a few trips, but a slip up, somewhere down the line is Sasuke saying he's going on a trip with Naruto and Naruto shows up at the Uchiha house after Sasuke has left, which could tie into how discover the similar schedules of Sasuke and Kushina. The reason why I say she may be confusing lust for love is because there's more to a relationship than just sex because that's what it feels like that's all she goes to him for. Yeah, I'm not going to lie, I do think analytically because I'm here for the story, not the sex. The ideas really only go about on the different places where they can have sex, which I really don't care about. Which does surprise me why the author doesn't branch out on other platforms because as I said before those ideas, keep them, it'd be better between you and the author because it feels lackluster if the author uses the idea for a chapter, but I've already seen how it goes because you explained it in your comment. It's the same with my own comments, but I'll say this, practically all stories on here depict Kushina as a lustful being, so it also wouldn't surprise me if any of the ideas are incorporated as well, even though, I've seen them before. Also the slip up with him mentioning Naruto, it would be nonchalant without thinking because he hangs out Naruto's house so much, it would only bring back Mikoto's suspicions, when Naruto shows up looking for Sasuke or something, but as I said who knows what could happen. The author probably has the structured from beginning to end, they just have other things in their daily life to do than hang out on AFF. But you and I are not going to do this back and forth, we both said our piece, you have things that you disagree with and I have things that you disagree with, we're changing the other's mind, I'm not trying to change your thoughts, I'm just saying min like you are doing as well, can we agree on that
Ha, spelling error, that last bit is supposed to say you have things I disagree with and I have things that you disagree with, not "you have things that you disagree with", wanted to clarify that
Holy Kushina's becoming such a nympho slut I love it! Her sexual awakening has been so hot and I hope it's only just getting started! Her being on the phone wit her family while getting plowed but Sasuke was hotttt those double meaning phrases!
Let me take back some of what I said earlier now that I read ch9 a second time, its not a slower chapter. The thrill of chapter 8 was just so hot and no doubt it's hard to immediately replicate it in the following chapter but Kushina did still become more open and slutty with her body and mannerisms. I was surprised sasuke was a bit jealous at the attention kushina was getting at the gym but he was probably just shocked at the sudden change. In an earlier chapter he liked showing her off and teasing her in public and kushina clearly loves the attention her new body is getting as well so he should encourage her more to show off. He should understand that others can look but only he can touch. He has what everyone else wants (kushina) and she's changing her entire behavior and lifestyle to be more pleasurable to him. Bet he felt amazing knowing all the guys in the club and back at the dorm were jealous of the hot milf he was fucking. He holds a lot of power so he needs to loosen up and use his leverage more often. He can still be jealous of Minato because for now kushina still has the fuck him so that no one finds out about their affair, but that jealously comes from the fact that Minato is actually fucking her, while strangers can only get to look at kushina and not touch. I know he doesn't want to come across as pushy but he's young and horny and he knows kushina craves him as well so he should start being more assertive and daring when around her, like when he pushed his thumb in her ass. Kushina shouldn't just be a sub however, she should match his energy and be daring as well which I think you've done an amazing job balancing their relationship to where neither are dominant in the relationship but instead their relationship is very natural and mutual/equal on both sides. Once in a while it would be great to see them change and one of them become more dominant and the other more submissive and a cool way to do that would be dares. Maybe they can have little bets and competitions at the gym on how much they can exercise or how many guys can kushina tease. Kushina could make a prediction and count the number of boners or guys that check her out and if the actual number is closer to her prediction or sasukes prediction. Another little competition they can have is during sex, who makes the other cum more or cum the fastest. In any case, the loser of the gym/sex bets and competitions would have to do something according to the winner. It would lead to a lot of hot situations and allow them to experiment with different things including who's the dominant and who's the submissive. Some examples could be kushina or sasuke having to set their phone wallpaper as the other for a day, to risk being caught. Sasuke having to work out with no underwear and risk popping a boner in the gym. Sasuke making kushina wear something that shows off her ass like a thong or bikini while her ass is red from his handprint on her ass cheek. Them leaving hickeys and bite marks on each other's bodies in dangerously open areas and having to hide them from their families. One of them making an excuse to visit or inviting the other to their house and secretly fooling around with their families nearby, but no actual sex (just yet) only teasing, similar to when sasuke stopped by kushinas house to drop something off and saw how sexy she was dressed and hugged her in front of naruto. For now he had to be careful, but maybe soon he could make an excuse to stop by for a kiss or quick blow job while naruto is busy upstairs or in the next room or something, and vice versa kushina could make an excuse to stop by for something real quick but she would obviously have to be a bit more careful than last time and more careful than sasuke (when he visits her at her house) considering mikoto is more observant than naruto and mikoto is still suspicious of sasuke for the moment. Or maybe she doesn't have to be as careful, kushina already fucked him when his parents were in the house, maybe she can pull that off again using a different excuse to stay over. I really appreciated the more hot situations that occur in a single chapter as compared to before. Ch 8 had kushina surprising him at his house and making out with him near their parents, then fucking him, then getting nipple piercings. Ch 9 had kushina teasing the gym with her new gym clothes, her getting fucked in her car, kushina wearing super short and revealing clothes around naruto and hugging sasuke twice in front of him (so fucking hot), kushina wearing a sexy dress at a club, leaving with him and fucking sasuke in a college dorm where people could hear, getting a thumb up her ass, begging to be impregnated, and leaving without panties and teasing the college kids the next morning. There were so many more hot situations compared to previous chapters and it doesn't feel overwhelming at all because you already spent so many earlier chapters on the development so now it happens naturally and you don't have to worry at all about what they're doing when they're not around each other. I hope you can consider making chapter outlines for the future chapters that involve certain sexy situations and circumstances kinda like what I mentioned above with the differences between ch 8 and ch9. You're doing fantastic without it, but I think it would greatly help and allow you to prepare and add in any ideas that you might like and respond quickly according to feedback (which you're the best at listening to). Like for example ch 10 could be more kushina ass training, buying her sexier outfits, the start of their sexy dares, and maybe some preparation for their first trip or extended period of time together, then ch 11 could be fucking with naruto on the phone, kushina showing off at the mall and not wearing underwear, kushina wearing sexy clothes at home and inviting sasuke over for some post workout stretches or yoga and naruto comes home early and walks in on them and is weirded out but understands why they're doing it and doesn't suspect anything and so on. What I'm saying is, maybe try building the future chapters around multiple hot situations and use those as an outline and expand upon them. You're probably already doing something similar but I think it's a great way to stay motivated and plan ahead. Your transitions between the sexy moments are fucking flawless, you don't need to worry about them at all. I also agree that there should be a way for them to spend more time together for longer periods of time or at least something that would allow them to go on a trip once in a while where they could really let loose and have a lot of fun. An Instagram page or a job would be hot too, could have fun using that for dares and setting up kushina to be an influencer/brand embassador would give her excuses to wear certain things and go to certain places without her family getting too suspicious, they wouldn't know at first and would probably mind it a lot when they find out, then back off a bit once they know she's happy and not posting or doing anything too scandalous (for now). Maybe when naruto and Minato find out, they can join her on a couple of these events or take a few pictures of her to loosen their suspicions and see that she's just enjoying her new body and fighting off a midlife crisis. Or maybe kushina could just be assertive like she was with naruto and tell them about it from the start, she's grown and she can do what she wants. Surely they would never expect her to be going out and posting these pics because she's cheating, she's just a boring mom who's always too busy working out, who could possibly take interest in her? I'm also open to talk or discuss the story if you want but you're already killing it and I can't wait to see what happens next.