so guessing you're done writing or maybe you're waiting for w/e story you've been loosely copying to update so you can edit it to your liking and then post it here as a new chapter. Not like this story is even labeled fucking correctly as you've done absolutely NO 3 somes even though you had the chance to bring Temari and Sakura together but didn't
just wish she drink the piss straight from his dick, her mouth wrapped around it, sealing her mouth shut around it so nothing escapes, and drinking every drop. only thing is missing is some loli pussy lol
lmao wow you deleted my reviews because I pointed out that this is NOT a harem story? All you've done so far is have your OC play around a little with Temari and seem to focus EVERYTHING on Sakura you don't have him truly making moves on other girls that he can be with. Honestly there's Hinata, TenTen, Ino, Hanabi, Shizune, Kurenai, Anko, Yugao, Moegi, and Tsunade all among the Konoha females that you could have him hypnotize but instead you have him hypnotize Temari and don't even have her do anything with Sakura and due to her not being in Konoha much right now all you'll do is have her be an occasional fuck. You need to rename this story as it's really NOT a HAREM
more titfucking please, it was literally only one part of the whole story, hopefully I see him fuck loli pussy too, anyways was a good story if your done with it, if not please keep adding more chapters. would love some piss drinking too but doubt that's your thing.
Love the story and can't wait for the next chapter. Only advice going forward is have him pleasure her a small bit as well oral and foreplay. Most of her pleasure bout to happen I assume in the next chapter. Wish you speedy writing
a decent start. looking forward to more