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January 26, 2006 at 12:00 AM
YAY you updated I've been waiting so long ^.^ great chapter finally some Naruto and Sasuke action! I love it well I'll ttyl bai!
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January 26, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Ohh you gonna have to update soon hun that was just too adorable
and believe me I was jumping on the bed when Sasuke was going through Naru's stuff that when I read the word TBC... I didn’t believe and I kept on pushing the button down until it almost broke
girl you can’t get me all riled up and then lave me hanging like that:(
so I guess what I’m trying to say is
PLEASE PLEASE UPDATE SOON PLEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEASE
Love ^_^
Looli
and believe me I was jumping on the bed when Sasuke was going through Naru's stuff that when I read the word TBC... I didn’t believe and I kept on pushing the button down until it almost broke
girl you can’t get me all riled up and then lave me hanging like that:(
so I guess what I’m trying to say is
PLEASE PLEASE UPDATE SOON PLEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEASE
Love ^_^
Looli
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January 11, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I have been waiting on this fic forever. I love it enough to wait this long but PLEASE hurry with the mext update. I love you. I love this fic. PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE write more. =^_^=
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January 9, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I love this fic. Please keep writing!
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December 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
umm... interesting fic thus far, though obviously pre-godaime. Potentially awesome plot -- I will continue reading until the end, at least.
A couple problems, though. Occasionally, perhaps due to formatting, words get truncated, or are just unidentifiable. Also, you seem to have issues with your i's and your ai's. A kuni is a country. A kunai is a weapon. Similarly, nasi is a weird romanization of nashi, which is either an asian pear or the classical negative (nai used to be nashi, and still is on forms and such.) Nasai is an honorific chunk that attaches to gomen in formal situations, usually with a person in your out-group (me-ue) or someone who ranks above you. If you're going to use gratuitous Japanese, at the very least use it correctly. The use of "kunai" was valid, but using the Japanese for "sorry" when we have a perfectly viable English equivalent that carries the exact same connotations is just annoying.
A couple problems, though. Occasionally, perhaps due to formatting, words get truncated, or are just unidentifiable. Also, you seem to have issues with your i's and your ai's. A kuni is a country. A kunai is a weapon. Similarly, nasi is a weird romanization of nashi, which is either an asian pear or the classical negative (nai used to be nashi, and still is on forms and such.) Nasai is an honorific chunk that attaches to gomen in formal situations, usually with a person in your out-group (me-ue) or someone who ranks above you. If you're going to use gratuitous Japanese, at the very least use it correctly. The use of "kunai" was valid, but using the Japanese for "sorry" when we have a perfectly viable English equivalent that carries the exact same connotations is just annoying.
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December 28, 2005 at 12:00 AM
okay, I take that back. I started the next chapter, and couldn't plow through the "jouinin," the "defiantly enough," the occasional lack of punctuation and weirdly truncated words. Seriously, if you got a beta, used spell-check and grammar-check, and brought Naruto's height down a foot or so, I'd totally dig this story, but as it is I simply cannot. I don't want to sound harsh, but you need some constructive criticism.
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December 7, 2005 at 12:00 AM
this is a really cool fic! i wonder when sasuke will finally find out naruto's secret identity? i can't wait! update soon!
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November 27, 2005 at 12:00 AM
this is a good story. Please tell me you are not ending it like this!!! Update soon! for the sake of your fans update soon!!
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October 25, 2005 at 12:00 AM
If u do not write another chapter soon im goin to hunt u down thru cyberspace this story is totally awsome i think u imagination is fantastic andtaht u really really need to write another chapter before i go insane wonderin what is gonna happen
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October 10, 2005 at 12:00 AM
i honestly exclaim that this is the best sasunaru fanfic i have ever read. it's so good because you made naruto seem cool and powerful even if he likes sasuke. the suspense and the unrevealed attraction between sasuke and naruto makes this story a even more compelling read. i'm begging you to update and not drop this story since it's just so good...can't wait till you update!