Found You

Author’s Notice

Lemon: No.
Spoilers: No.
Chapter: No.

Hello there folks. Loyal readers and the annoyed. Annoyed, rather.

6000 Hits~! 50 Reviews!

Thanks to all of you, especially my frequent reviewers like Lell and blisblop. It's nice to get regular feedback from one chapter to the next. It means a lot to me when people say that they appreciate how complex the characters have gotten for them. The idea that they appreciate the series more because of the fandom, and not despite of it, really does make an impression on me.

Thanks for all the hard work you people go through with sticking to this, and while I do appreciate the pats on the back and the squeals of delight, Annoyed has made a very valid point.

Much of this story is rambling, and confusing. Mostly because I don’t get a beta, and because I don’t even do a second-draft, or third.

And when I do, Word fucks with my spelling and corrects things for me. Isn’t that nice.

Regardless! I won’t make any excuses, and I apologize for those of you that have a brain ache trying to read this story. Frequently, I do look back on this project and sigh at what was going through my head at the time.

You people deserve better.

That’s why, this story is going to be POSTPONED.

In the downtime, I intend to rewrite most of these chapters. Not change their intention, or anything large in the story. But I will be fixing inconsistencies and so many of the: run-ons, repetitive pronouns, descriptive phrases, and much of the babbling of internal thought that needlessly takes place.

Lell had it right, much of the confusion comes from the fact I RP too much, and have an established perspective. So taking control of more than one character simultaneously does require a bit more effort to distinguish.

Thanks for the swift kick in the ass, Anny.

It's not that I hate your review. I really do appreciate it. But I was talking to some of my author buddies, and I've been told that 'bad' reviews can often turn them off from ever reading a fic they may have otherwise enjoyed.

That's why your review is going to go right here. By fourteen chapters, everyone will already have their own opinions of this story, and if people agree with you (and I hope they do), then it won't be lost, and it still won't be something that upsets new readers, and even dedicated fans.

I could probably counter many of the qualms you have with it...

...and I think it will. Everyone deserves to know what I think of this review, right?

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Annoyed 2006-06-27 id # 3000014111
I've read five chapters and in that time, the only thing I have gotten from it is frustration and a bad ass headache. I should have stopped at the second but I was so faithful to the prospect of a decent KakashiXSasuke fic that I kept going.

Why am I giving this a bad review?

You lack flow. You lack it to the point where I have to read a paragraph over and over again to understand who is saying what and who is doing what. Your punch lines, your one liners... they aren't funny and only add to the confusion. Your prose is sloppy. It shows that you certainly lack the discipline to use prose in the first place. And for the love of god, use their fucking names. I didn't understand who was doing what!

Another thing, the five chapters that I read were so long winded that I skipped paragraphs because it was just pointless internal dialogue that had nothing to do with the plot-- or if it did, I had no idea... but now that I think about it... I don't think I am inclined to care, either.

You seem intelligent. Good for you. You know big words. Yay and thank god for dictionaries. Now get some structure in this story and it would actually be decent.

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I agree. the gender-tense modifiers and descriptions need work. But do you -really- want me going 'jounin', 'genin', 'silver-haired man', 'brunet' all the time? I guess I'll use 'boy' and 'man' more frequently, because using their rank brings rank in to their relationship, which Kakashi does enough by himself. Using 'he' for much of the scenes between two males in this fiction tends to erase who is who, which is good; it means that either one of them could be experiencing that, and so, it doesn't matter who feels it - so long as we know that they do.

Using the age might help people stay in perspective that this is a very illegal relationship, no matter how right it is, which is what romance is all about ne?

I'll agree, many of the points in this fic are jagged. I hop environments frequently without giving accurate signal. But I'm not going to put ~*~*~*~ all the damn time, or


skip an extra line, because with as many typos as I have, people could very well mistake it as such. And I don't want the 'flow' of the text interrupted by ~*~*~*~ because people see that coming, and then know the scene is about to end.

The typos will be fixed. As will the run-ons. Much of the time I'll sit there and read a sentence four, five times, every other week, and the problem with me is it still makes sense when I take in the full scope of the sentence. I guess when you take it in pieces, rather than following the commas that group the thouts together, and keep them from bleeding in to others to make it a hopeless run-on, that's where a lot of the confusion can settle in.

Lookit that. That made sense, didn't it?

I'll also say that many of my paragraphs, for lack of better term, are short. Not because I couldn't make them longer, but because people already have access to the manga and the anime. They are quite familiar with the Naruto environment, and I will not make a scene hopelessly complicated by reciting details to them of places they've already been and Kishimoto already reminds us of frequently.

As for the internal thought, and the humor...

Most of the reason I made this fic, besides wanting something going on for Kakashi and Sasuke, was to be able to describe Sasuke from many of the character's PoVs without being Sasuke. I'm saving Sasuke's internal reflection for very specific moments, like his downward spirals. I wanted to help people understand Sasuke from everyone else's PoV, not only to help them identify which person they most associate with in their idea of him - but also because I don't want a neutral perspective. There is no neutral way to percieve Sasuke.

Up to now, much of the reflection has come from Kakashi, which is good. As the fic matures to follow more of the series, other PoVs will arise.

Part of good fiction is being able to keep characters in character. They aren't mine, and I would be committing an injustice to not explain why I think such a person would think such a way. And I've always understood Sasuke and Kakashi's relationship as one that's simply understood.

Much of this fiction is thought because they think so much about each other. There's very little they say to each other; they don't believe in useless conversation. While that means I could also put a great deal more action in every chapter, up to now the series, too, was progressing very slowly. It took 54 episodes and, what, nine volumes of manga to get to this point? In all of that time, the most they did was fight Haku, and have the preliminaries, introduce Orochimaru, and have Sasuke begin his fall from grace.

...I have to fill that space somehow.

The humor. You've said a great deal of it isn't funny, but it's not supposed to be. Not to us. We aren't Kakashi and Sasuke, so what's funny to them won't always be funny to someone watching them through this fiction. It's up to me, crawling around in their heads, and peoples' want to understand the nuances of the characters, that will help them understand why it's funny to them and thus funny to us.

I wanted this fiction to be about them - to be about Sasuke - not about us watching them. We're voyuers, and voyuers enjoy themselves best when they know their stars aren't paying attention to them.

I will not stoop to the lowest common denominator. But I will not disregard you, either, Anny.

Again, thank you for sending your flaming review. If you got through all of this, or just skimmed, the point is you can't deny that I appreciate you.

I'm sorry that everything I made this fiction for, and how, wasn't clear to you. But I appreciate you.

I hope the rest of the reviewers feel the same way.

--In fact, folks, leave your reviews! I most definitely leave this argument open, because I don't want to speak for everyone.