Broken

Review responses at the bottom of this.
I'm posting this seperate simply because it's damn long for an author's note but is still important to read.

This was written for a contest on Y!gallery club-Fanfiction 101. It was a plot bunny that BrucesGirl and DominicShade had submitted (and have since removed) but I already wrote it so I'm posting it. I'm sorry they don't like the direction I went with it I hope others at least enjoy it. Still it's dedicated to them whether they dislike it or not because it was their original plot bunny.

Due to the original plot bunny being removed I felt the need to explain what this was based on so people know what's going on and why. Although my beta says it stands pretty well on it's own, but if you have any questions feel free to drop me a line: Mikittalanisha@yahoo.com

The summary of it which is completely not going to do the piece any kind of justice was that Ibiki and Iruka were in a relationship. It was abusive. Iruka likes rough sex because of something implied with Mizuki which is never fully stated but kind of assumed that Mizuki liked rough sex and so since Iruka loved Mizuki he got to where he associated pain and love. Naruto finds out and is /really/ upset by it, can't stand Ibiki for doing what Iruka ask (demands/begs) him to do. Goes for Ramen like he does with Iruka but gets irritated and leaves, Iruka follows him all worried and trying to find out what's wrong. They get back to Naruto's place and he's trying to get Naruto to talk about it. Naruto tries to pass it off as Kakashi being away and him being lonely and at first Iruka thinks he means there was something between him and Kakashi and he's really quite pissed over it. Comes to light that no there is nothing going on there, they(Kakashi and Naruto) hang out together that's all. Iruka pushes more to find out what's really bothering Naruto. Naruto kind of flips out and ask Iruka if he really wants to talk about it, pointing out rope burns on Iruka's wrist. And ask how Iruka can want him to do those things to him and says he knows Ibiki doesn't even like rough sex - Kakashi told him so. And that he would never hurt Iruka and he then kind of forces himself onto Iruka (part of it is him kissing Iruka's thighs) and Iruka seems to be torn between liking it and hating it and there is a mention that Naruto's lust is also the kyuubi's and it cuts off before anything beyond that really happens.


Review Response:
Alika613: First of all thank you! KakaIru is my OTP too even though I can both read and write them with others. They are still meant for each other in my head. I'm not 100% satisfied with either Ibiki or Naruto but I will probably be writing more with them when I eventually get around to do a second part (from Iruka's POV) to this. And then I'll be able to explain what's going on in their heads.

I have been dying to hear what a masochist would think. I'm glad it was believable because I have no actual experience beyond the very light stuff. I discussed the topic heavily with my hubby before writing this, so that I could understand the character and why their reactions would be. It helped that I had some psychology and sociology classes before so I understand Pavlov's Dog stuff too.

Oh and you might enjoy Moving In, it has KakaIru and GenRai and the smut for GenRai is light BDSM.


Anise: I responded to you before they screwed up my stories and took down the responses one. so annoying how they did that. But just wanted to say thank you again and that I'm glad you liked it. I always look forward to your reviews. BTW if you have a suggestion for who to pair Ibiki with, just let me know and I'll write and epi for him.

Guesto-chan: Thank you x million. I really questioned posting it but Athame loved it so much that I just decided to say screw it. I'm on hmm speaking terms with the original author's again but the admiration I had is gone. I hate that but I hold more stock in how a person treats others than their skill as a writer or an artist. I like playing with Kakashi, I think he's got a LOT of depth to him. And I love making him Iruka's hero/protector because Iruka needs one. Not because he's weak but because he (in my head at least) never puts himself first so he needs somebody who will.

KareNeko: Yes lots and lots of willing underlings who are all I'm sure willing to patch the big softie up. ^.^ I do feel bad for him though and so it'll be nice to write him a happy alternate ending.