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schedule
April 12, 2004 at 12:00 AM
Ooh! I like! I want to sequal please! plretty pretty pretty pleeeeeeeeaaaaaaaase?? Hee hee! maybe with Kakashi on top ne?
schedule
March 25, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I saw the manga this story came from. I liked it in manga form, but because i dont speak japanese this story worked as a good translation. thanks!
schedule
March 23, 2004 at 12:00 AM
I'm going to be honest with you. This was utter and horrid crap. I believe my eyes are still bleeding.
You've managed to completely forget the character's personalities, your grammar is something from another planet and you've got no structure what so ever in this piece of verbal vomit you've the guts to call a fic. This is the stuff that's supposed to stay on your hard-drive and never ever to be put on the net. Please do so in the future.
Raping the characters and ignoring even the most basic routines the characters have in their manners and persons is something I never thought someone would be able to do. Please, the next time you post something learn how to use line breaks and a basic structure in your text. I don't know what kind of an idiot would enjoy this kind of shit. Because, I wont' lie to you, that's what it is. Some fangirl hacking away at her favorite characters with no sense of ambtion or respect for them.
Go learn English and mature, you can even try to add insight into your writing. I hated this one, I really did. And I know I'm taking the time to tell you this, and you've undoubtedly have a few things to say about that; but do understand that I don't know you personally, but judging by the way you write you're nothing short of a monkey with a keyboard. But foremost, get your fact straight before you start writing about anything.
You can take this all in your stride and try to develop as a writer.
Or you can stop infecting people with vomit like this.
The choice is yours and you can so nothing to change the way I think.
If you plan to keep on writing, produce something actually worth the read and I might re-think my opinion.
Sincerely flaming you,
Chtuhnu
You've managed to completely forget the character's personalities, your grammar is something from another planet and you've got no structure what so ever in this piece of verbal vomit you've the guts to call a fic. This is the stuff that's supposed to stay on your hard-drive and never ever to be put on the net. Please do so in the future.
Raping the characters and ignoring even the most basic routines the characters have in their manners and persons is something I never thought someone would be able to do. Please, the next time you post something learn how to use line breaks and a basic structure in your text. I don't know what kind of an idiot would enjoy this kind of shit. Because, I wont' lie to you, that's what it is. Some fangirl hacking away at her favorite characters with no sense of ambtion or respect for them.
Go learn English and mature, you can even try to add insight into your writing. I hated this one, I really did. And I know I'm taking the time to tell you this, and you've undoubtedly have a few things to say about that; but do understand that I don't know you personally, but judging by the way you write you're nothing short of a monkey with a keyboard. But foremost, get your fact straight before you start writing about anything.
You can take this all in your stride and try to develop as a writer.
Or you can stop infecting people with vomit like this.
The choice is yours and you can so nothing to change the way I think.
If you plan to keep on writing, produce something actually worth the read and I might re-think my opinion.
Sincerely flaming you,
Chtuhnu
schedule
March 2, 2004 at 12:00 AM
it was really good......but i read a comic with that storyline!!!!..........coincedance?
schedule
March 2, 2004 at 12:00 AM
i found the comic!! it's fun to read.....but your story made my reading japenese problem go!
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