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October 6, 2005 at 12:00 AM
AAAAAAaaaaaa wonderfull!!! love it!! write more will you ^______^
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July 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Not bad. Great angst. Keep going.
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July 17, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Intersting, not bad, a like into the inner turnoil of the charaters. Good job just watch for grammer and tenses (past, presnt, and future) Keep up the good work.
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July 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Yes drabbley drabbley. You should just combine the first couple of chapters, then it won't be a drabble. But I liked it anyway! I really liked the last chapter the most, you should definately finish this one!
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July 16, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Okay good start, but the chapters need to be WAY longer. All five of your chapters where more like one. Instead of doing one chapter everytime POV changes, try a new paragraph, 5th Chapter was okay for that. Aside from chapter lenght, it's really quite good so keep up the good work and I can't wait for the next chapter to come up ^^
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July 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Damn! Now that's random! Good though! Lot's of angst for such a small package! *chuckles for no reason* It sure does leave the reader questioning...
*winks*
d(^-^)b
*winks*
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July 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
This story looks like it could be really good, but try to make your chapters a little bit longer. I'm lovin it so far! ^_^
~Adan
~Adan