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January 10, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Jeez... I really hate this guy. make sasuke or naruto kill him in the end. keep writing, i want to know what u have planned for this.
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October 13, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Please keep writing!!!
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October 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Wow I like how your story is going. I'm looking forward to the next chapter. ^-^
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October 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
i think that this is a great stroy! very origanl (sp?)! i can't wait to to see the next chapter! well good luck and happy writing
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October 2, 2005 at 12:00 AM
I love the story.. I can't wait to read the next chapter :)
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October 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
please continue...its a very interesting idea!! :D
it is a SasuNaru rite?? ^^ ^^
also...plz continue ur story in fanfiction net~~
its a great story!!!
hisachan
it is a SasuNaru rite?? ^^ ^^
also...plz continue ur story in fanfiction net~~
its a great story!!!
hisachan
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October 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Well, you have my attention. That was a great opener!!!!! That alone really got me excited to see where this story will go. This seems like it will be a great peice of fiction. I can't wait to see more!!!!
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October 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
wow. i just gotta say this is GREAT!!! i really like how you've described that komaru character. dam i hate him. lol
your writing style is also great! it's pretty good for a starter chapter. i wonder ..... are you going to have komaru's true character exposed to others?? like, i can see now how he thinks he's right and naruto is a demon and all. are there any other people that will find out about this side of him?? i'd so love it when someone does and shoves it in his face and says HE'S the only demon within konoha borders, not naruto.
you have made a really perfect character that is so great that we all hate him. lmao
your writing style is also great! it's pretty good for a starter chapter. i wonder ..... are you going to have komaru's true character exposed to others?? like, i can see now how he thinks he's right and naruto is a demon and all. are there any other people that will find out about this side of him?? i'd so love it when someone does and shoves it in his face and says HE'S the only demon within konoha borders, not naruto.
you have made a really perfect character that is so great that we all hate him. lmao
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October 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
A really well written fic!
What are you going to do with Naru-chan? If you have to make Sasuke have a heir ...please DON´T PAIR HIM WITH SAKURA (sorry but I hate her) EVERYONE BUT NOT SAKURA!!... o.o Is Naruto going to have Sasuke´s child? (recently noticed the Mpreg)
The council elder can rot in hell!!! I could i would go and starngle him to death arghh!! <--sorry for the violence
Well at least i hope you will continue soon and won´t make me suffer ;_;
What are you going to do with Naru-chan? If you have to make Sasuke have a heir ...please DON´T PAIR HIM WITH SAKURA (sorry but I hate her) EVERYONE BUT NOT SAKURA!!... o.o Is Naruto going to have Sasuke´s child? (recently noticed the Mpreg)
The council elder can rot in hell!!! I could i would go and starngle him to death arghh!! <--sorry for the violence
Well at least i hope you will continue soon and won´t make me suffer ;_;
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October 1, 2005 at 12:00 AM
All in all, it's a good story. I like where you're going with it. The only thing that gets me is your grammar, but it's not so bad that I can't enjoy the story. A little proofreading does wonders. I hope you continue to write, for it sounds like a really cool plot! Hope to see more soon!