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by kimbop

person DangerousAndDemonicDevil
schedule January 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
its a gr8 UPDATE SOON PLS
person Dark Phoenix
schedule January 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Woah. *dumps bucket of iced water on self* All hail Queen Sakura and her sex slave Sa--!

That was pretty darn good for a first try at smut. The Ero-sennin woulda been proud to have you as a disciple. XD

Ignoring the English typos and such:

"Onee-chan" means "Big Sister", "Onii-chan" means "Big Brother". Both have long vowels (double 'E' and double 'I'). Oni-chan (single 'I') means something like "Monster-chan".

"Icha" is slang for the root word "iku", which means "go" in english. So the titles mean something like ""Go, go, paradise" and "Go, go, violence". But I think in the licensed comic, they called it "Make Out Paradise"... for whatever reason. *shrug*

That said... Gambare! Keep going! Ya got a great lemony series!

I hope Sakura gets to do the real deal with Sasuke! *ducks*
person allyluv
schedule January 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
hi! i read all 10 chapters in a row. i had a tough week at work and your story made my day! i was laughing non-stop in almost every chapter. you kept everyone in character and believable. i can't wait for more! you're truly a genius!!!!
person Aya
schedule January 20, 2006 at 12:00 AM
*dies from bloodloss* THAT was great!!! I absolutely loved it!! God that made me... wow... that was awesome. I can NOT wait for the next chapter...I wonder how Sasuke-kun is actually going to read it though... Hmm... closet perv maybe?
person LilyDraken
schedule January 20, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Awesome! Great chapter! Oh, Icha Icha means "make out," so make out paradise, or make out violence. So you hit it right on the head! AWESOME! Keep it coming! I can't wait to see how Sasuke-kun reacts!
person Anon
schedule January 20, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Oni-chan too? Cause that's older brother. O-ne-chan
person Anon
schedule January 19, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Finding sasusaku fics is hard enough, finding sasusaku fics with good writing and with a solid grasp of the characters is nigh impossible. This one is a godsend for us tired of seeing Sasuke and naruto humping like rabbits. Thank you. I do have one request though. Please have sasuke beat the crap out of sai. Lord knows the little bugger deserves it.
person Hillary
schedule January 19, 2006 at 12:00 AM
This is soooo cool!!! And I have never Heard of Sai. Any chance I can get a link? also please update asap please. I really love this paring.
person Lilydraken
schedule January 17, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Awesome awesome AWESOME! Keep up the great work! I can't wait to see what happens next!!!
person ArishaGinkaze
schedule January 16, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Man i keep wondering who it is that keeps watching Sakura! I can't wait for Sakura's meeting with Jiraiya either. I'm glad you put Kakashi in it because he always makes a story interesting! =D Update soon!