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for Unfinished Business

by AkiraDawn

person logophobia
schedule August 1, 2006 at 12:00 AM
this chapter is an example of why i like your writing, it isn't just pure sex like alot of people's stories it shows actual relationship.
person Moiraine
schedule July 30, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Shizune is a prude for this crowd. Lol. OMFG, I freaking love Pakkun. He's sooo awesome! I bet you think I'm borderline obsessed, but he's sooo awesome, I luuurve him, he's not in the series enough. I love Kurenai's cooking. "That's my specialty. Boxed things." :P Kakashi's kinda quiet, but that's in his character. He seems to like making fun of Kurenai in the series. I dunno, it seems like something to put in there. Gosh, I love this story. Thank you!
person windsoftiti
schedule July 27, 2006 at 12:00 AM
hmmm shes not pregnant aye? well, nice job!
person Moiraine
schedule July 26, 2006 at 12:00 AM
YEEHAW! PAKKUN! I love that dog! He has to stay forever! He's the best thing so far! God I love him! He's soo funny. Pakkun should be like "Anko, I'm sorry I've been so mean to you. In order to apologize, I'll let you touch my paw." That'd be hilarious! Anyways, I kinda wish Kurenai would have been pregnant. And Please tell me that they aren't going to be drunk the whole time, bleh. It'd get a little redundant. Anyways, thanks for the awesome chapter, and I hope you have fun on vacation!
person Terri
schedule July 23, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Yay sequel. Cant wait for the update.
person Anon
schedule July 23, 2006 at 12:00 AM
The idea is a good one, to say the least, but staying on the point and not going into too much pointless detail would make the story a whole lot better; Getting a Beta would be a good thing. Too many details on pointless parts, and going completely off the point drags the story on and can make some readers lose interest quickly. Other than that, everything else seems perfect.
person Sayomi XD
schedule July 23, 2006 at 12:00 AM
hehehhe can't wait to see wut results Kurenei has when she gets to the mauntains! update sooN!
person ???
schedule July 22, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I like the pairing and the relationship between Anko and Kakashi in this story. I liked the part at the end where Anko informed Kakashi about the 'might be' pregnancy and who he should ask: the man or the lack of/broken condom. I hope you continue this soon.
person Moiraine
schedule July 22, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I can tell that a lot of this story will end up being semi-awkward moments with poor, dear Kakashi trying to imply some sort of marriage to Anko, and she's going to be too dense to get it. I love that you had Pakkun. You should so have Pakkun around, almost 24/7, he makes things soooo great, and he's basically Kakashi's pet. I am so excited to see where this goes next! With all that alchohol...gosh, will there ever be a moment when they aren't smashed? Good bye livers....yeesh.
person james
schedule July 22, 2006 at 12:00 AM
its great just like inside on the outside it now one of my favorite storys