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September 20, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Erm. I couldn't get halfway through it, honestly. May I offer you some helpful pointers? A story's quantity is not as important as the quality. Here's a few things to work on so that maybe you can get some higher ratings, ne?
1) Formatting. Read some highly rated stories and note how the paragraphs and spacing go.
2) Get a beta. One that knows grammar, HTML, and formatting basics.
3) Use the text input instead of the file upload in your Author's Panel. It works much better because you can see your work.
Good luck!
1) Formatting. Read some highly rated stories and note how the paragraphs and spacing go.
2) Get a beta. One that knows grammar, HTML, and formatting basics.
3) Use the text input instead of the file upload in your Author's Panel. It works much better because you can see your work.
Good luck!
schedule
September 20, 2006 at 12:00 AM
I am very sorry but you're story is unreadable as it is. You need to separate your paragraphs and also remember that whenever someone new starts talking that you should start another paragraph with their speech. And it is also bad for to write speech using capital letters. It's unpleasing to the eye and would be much better if you wrote it normally and followed with a 'he/she yelled'. I'm not sure how your plot is, I'm afraid I seriously just could not read that giant block of words, but I would like to read through it once it has been edited.
Consult a beta reader and please do try posting again, I'll be waiting to see. =)
Consult a beta reader and please do try posting again, I'll be waiting to see. =)