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for Hinata Comes of Age

by Hestia

person kyubi_teaser
schedule October 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
*giggles* ooooooh... something else just came to mind... how about a Kiba/Hina/Shino three way?? ACK! *giggles* ok... 12 hour overnight shift makes me loopy... but still...think about it, ne?
person tasukigirl
schedule October 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Actually, neji is rather prissy and I could totally see himself being crazy protective over hinata. I'm glad he did get interrupted before raping his cousin, cuz I don't think this fic was meant to take such a dark turn. I do love how you made Naruto so obedient though. He *is* such a sweetheart, though I imagine he'd be a noisy one ;) Please do include more Naru/hina in the future. They're so cute together. Btw, I *love* how you wrote Sai in the earlier chapter. I literally laughed out loud at his lines. I like the fic so far. Keep up the good work.
person logohobia
schedule October 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
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YAY. very good sex scene, great detail and insight. keep it up!!
person Angst
schedule October 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Wow, that was just wow. I'm rather breathless with that chapter. I enjoyed all of the lemony goodness. Wow!
person RAW19
schedule October 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
now that's what i'm talking about. i love hinata/naruto! i may not have enjoyed the neji chapter, cause who enjoys rape? but that doesn't mean i'll stop reading. i look forward to the next chapter!
person VL
schedule October 3, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Eh, not much to say I suppose.

I suppose I wonder how Naruto took the talk with Neji, and what really happened to him that night.

Glad he was taken out of the picture, Neji I mean.

I really don't think I will be reading much more of the story though, not if it just going to be Hinata/every male in Konoha or who ever the author wants to bang her. I was kind of hoping for a good story, but it's turning into somehting else.
person Angst
schedule October 3, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Wow, that did shock me. I'm glad Neji was unsuccessful. I dislike most nc fic's because they're horrible unrealistic or pointless. This wasn't. I'll be happy to read whatever you have up on thursday or friday. It there like a mailing list to know when your updating fic's. I'm not quite used to this site yet, so I really don't have much of a clue.
Also, this story deserves a much higher rating then what it's gotten. I think most people don't really think of Hinata as being sexual. As a human being she's bound to be though, unless she were psycho. Besides, don't they always say you should beware of the quiet ones.
Also, I really look forward to some ShikaXHina action. Remebering the first chapter, I think that one could be deliciously kinky.
Thanks for the chapter.
person Al
schedule October 3, 2006 at 12:00 AM
What compelled you to make Hinata the village bicycle anyway? It just doesn't seem to fit her. Er, anyway, your writing style is quite good. I just wonder about your story ideas. But whatever floats your boat.
person Anon
schedule October 3, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Very good so far. I can't wait to see what happens next!
person RAW19
schedule October 3, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Damn, son! having read this and your other fic, "make me forget", i can say you're one hell of an author.