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So nice... yeah! Gimme more goodies! I like the way you are going with your characters... I dont think its slow...its in good timing, nyan... continue!

I'm loving this story so far. Can't wait until the next update.

This has definately caught my interest. I'm definately looking forward to reading more of this.

Sorry for the short review but I noticed this before going to sleep and I have work tommorow

~ Kaze

I love your story... now, there is a problem with a few words... 'ante rage' is 'entourage' or the people that follow somebody important around. 'elsebut' should be 'else but'... and 'in site' should be 'in sight' I believe... for it refers to something being within one's gaze. The rest is perfect....nyan!!! i love the way this is going... and I really wonder why Naruto is willing to punish himself so... not fair! It hurts not to have Sasuke around... hopefully Gaara will help him overcome this depression..nyan! Please update...and dont get mad I pointed at those words..ne?

^^ Yay! You update fast and that makes me happy. And the people who are being mean to me should shut up cause everyone always ask fro the athors to hurry and update so you all better shut up and when a person reviews they are just telling the athor on what they think so NEH! But your doing a wonderful job and you are defiantly putting action in this and this keeps my interest. Can't wait for the next chapter =3

please... more! This is getting so much better! nyan!! I love the twists and turns!! gimme!!

whomever said that was boring really doesnt know art from a shopping list. I find those three chapters short and well developed... write more?

btw... dont you dare change the tone of this you hear??? If somebody wants jokes and actions tell them to go find a movie or something. YOu dont hurry up action, you dont force comedy... it just flows... so if your characters dont feel like being funny... that's fine. Just dont go against the natural flow of the story... there are people that appreciate the effort put into words... I loved the action of that almost fight between them.. it was full of tension, nyan! Me likes a lot! Naruto's feelings and actions are just a bit confusing... when he orders people around. ONLY then... wonder if its planned... nyan... curious... well yeah... dont let those around you change your style...your grammar's good and your style crisp... like an apple. I like that, so dont change unless you want me to be very, very upset....

Yes much better ^^ Don't worry you aren't the only one having trouble writing a story. I'm writing two already and my spelling and grammar is horrible. But, now I have a beta but don't worry your doing great with your story and I hope you'll check mine out if you have enough time.

Update sooN!