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for It Wouldn't Work

by NinPao

schedule January 30, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I think I've read this before. Oh well. I don't mind rereading fics if they're good. One thing I want to bring up is the break-up of the story. It could have very well been a one-shot instead of a multi-chaptered fic and the effect probably would have been better for the whole "sudden revelation" theme you had.
person llyoung
schedule January 30, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Your story is great. It's the first one I read with this pairing.
person marcee
schedule January 2, 2007 at 12:00 AM
will there be mor? i like it alot!
person Anon
schedule November 21, 2006 at 12:00 AM
zha shu le que? le magnifique!
person none
schedule November 17, 2006 at 12:00 AM
rocksome
person Schala
schedule November 6, 2006 at 12:00 AM
interesting piece there.
different from your Naru/Sasu but just as good.
Can't wait to see what else you have up your sleeve.
^-^
person jess
schedule November 4, 2006 at 12:00 AM
ahhh! that adorable and HOT!!!! ^_^ thank you much! i loved the pairing! very unique and fun. *HUG*
person Anon
schedule November 2, 2006 at 12:00 AM
Great story! That's a pairing I hadn't thought of before to be honest, but it does work. Yamato is so creepy in ways, but so cool too, heh. I like the way Kakashi aggressively approached him to dispel Yamato's belief that teamwork would suffer. If nothing, the fact that Naruto and Sasuke work so well together proves that's not true. Good writing and flows well. :) Great job!
person kyuubigirl
schedule November 1, 2006 at 12:00 AM
How fun to read about a different pairing, and you made kakashi really sexy with how he twisted all Yamato's words around. And I like how you pulled in some SasuNaru stuff. LOL and what Naruto said at the end in his sleep after what he said before. That was very good!
person Anon
schedule November 1, 2006 at 12:00 AM
lol so funny and so kawaii. Yamato blushing.....right, but that bitch aint stealing away my kakashi. Hes mine, ALL MINE! hehehe