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i hope you update this tale soon i just finished it and loved it

Love the story hope you update soon.

hope you can update this story soon.

Awwh Itachi and Naruto are so cute. I am not a big fan of Ita/Sasu but there was so little of it here that it was bearable and not unpleasant. Its kind of funny to see Itachi freak like that, it is usually a typical reaction of guys to labor. I hope you aren't planning on killing Naruto, we haven't even gotten an engagement out of Itachi yet, nah just joking but for real please don't have him die.

wow please update sooooooooooooooooooooon :):):):):):P:P:P

*makes strangling gestures* Jubey. Go. A. WAY....i suggest a mass ingoring of Jubes' comments from now on everyone. humm? -.~
Kaa-san, i'll do that just let me read over again coz i've forgotten which parts i thought needed tweaking...eheh...^^;; x.x

Had to come back to see if you had read the review... it's been a while since I left one like that to anyone. And trust me, I only read two chapters and i couldnt take it anymore. I am not jealous... O_O For whoever said THAT. Why the hell would I be jealous? I honestly just dont like the story. And I didn't say your grammer was wrong, actually if I remember correctly that was the only complement I paid you. Thats about the only thing that I liked... was that i understood it. But like I said, I still felt like I was reading a story created by the mind set of a 12 year old kid who could spell really good... O_O And it horribly is out of chracter... EVERYONE. Itachi... I mean, I can't ever picture Itachi that nice. It doesn't humanize him... why the fuck would anyone want to huminize him to begin with? He's so hot being as evil as he is. If any one wants to read a REAL story with Itachi being as hot and evil as he is rightfully supposed to be. Read: The Never played Symphonies by Previously_Recorded. It's on this site. And maybe if you read that story you'll get better ideas. O_O This fic sucks and arugh, I give with this. Haha.. bye!


--- Jubes

Okay your grammar isn't so horrible... but I feel like this is being written by a 12 year old who has really good spelling and grammar skills. This is COMPLETELY OOC. Horribly so. People now in days have a hard time finding good stories, so when they find the promise of an author who keeps updating, and they're actually able to understand what is being written, they get over excited... it's sad but it's true. I don't hate you, I just don't like the fact that itachi has an EXCUSE for killing his caln? What the fuck... if you're gonna write a story so fucking OOC make a frikken warning, why dont you? I was soooo appalled by this. Itachi is a cold blooded murderer, and really, does he need an excuse as to why he killed his family... even if he does have one (which is unknown to us, excpet maybe to become more powerful and to gain his sharingan) It sure as hell was not going to be to protect a little boy... Who cant whipe his own bugers. *sigh* You're lucky that my review is even this long an I took the time to explain... I only did it because really if you came up with a better plot, characters that are not so horribly out of characters, and maybe a little realism involving characters that people are used to watching with their OWN personalities already intact, then perhaps you could be a good writer...


Prove me wrong. Im called a bitch beccause I speak my mind. I dont mean to be an ass, but if I have to be one just to be honest... then Im an ass. Don't give up on writing though... I wouldn't want to take somthing like that away. Just realize that you need to keep them in characers... and bla bla bla I give.


-- Jubes.

Jubes is stupid. I really like this story and I really want you to continue it. I've been really enjoying it. Please ignore Jubes and anyone else like Jubes and continue with your writing.

Ya know I really like this story so dont listen to the shit heads of the world. You keep writing and I'll keep reading.