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Chapter 11: “Feigned horror?” It was feigned! Hah! Take that one, Sasuke! XD . . . Oooooh (*shiver*shiver*) Sasuke is NOT going to like this. O.O . . . . “Mission. With Sasuke.” Oh my. . . . I like the curious connection between Shikamaru and Naruto. . . . That’s a good question, Naruto: Who hasn’t fucked Sasuke yet? That could’ve been likely to in this story? . . . . “‘Incident’ with his sensei?” Would that be Asuma’s death? . . . . Is Shikamaru mad because Naruto’s not making it any easier for him? Or might be rubbing it in? õ_ô . . . . So clever! “The language of silence!” I love it! ^_^ . . . . A year. Holy shit. . . . Interesting, Shikamaru’s experience with Sasuke. (Though I’m still not into Shikamaru sexually in any way.) . . . . Ooh, I love this distinction! “He’s capable of love. He’s incapable of showing love. But he can love.” Cool. . . . And I love Naruto’s anger and jealousy that someone else knows stuff that should’ve been only his to know. . . . Not Neji? He slept with girls too? Thank God it wasn’t the remaining Sannin or Iruka. But Kakashi? And Kurenai? That’s waaaay beyond fucked up. And how the hell did he get Hinata?? Or Lee? I thought they were in love with other people! Jeezus, he’s marked Konoha as his official territory, for crying out loud! (*sigh*mumbles*) Why’d he have to sleep with girls? That’s just wrong. -_- How did you choose who he hadn’t slept with? . . . . Okay, raping someone should drive home the fact that he doesn’t care. True, he’s possessive as hell, but Shikamaru could’ve phrased that a little better. You don’t rape someone you care about, no matter what the excuse. . . . Boy, “victim” is right. Trust Sasuke to confuse want and rejection and all that stuff. Thank God the Sasuke of this fic never got to me, he would’ve had to kill me to keep me away. Not even driving me insane would’ve . . . arrrgh, he’s scary. Now I know what Shino meant when he said in that other chapter that “the rest of us know better.” Sasuke made them see that way. Eeeeeevillllllll. . . . Say what you want, Shikamaru, I still don’t get it. Part of my prudish moral code is that forcing someone to act on desires they would otherwise never act upon, or never want to act upon = rape. I’m very touchy on that subject. And I don’t like the idea of you in a sexual situation. And I’m pissed as hell at Sasuke in this fic (which is a little unusual since he’s my favorite character in the manga). And I’m totally confused in this whole dialogue about who to be mad at and who to not be mad at. Thank you so much, Shikamaru. Thank you so much, Sasuke. Thank you so much, Shino. You all just threw my good mood out the window. (To the Author: Really sorry for bitching about this here, but I’m a passionate reader.) . . . . Yeah, I don’t feel so good either at the mention of Kakashi. -_- . . . . “Now that is definitely a question you need to ask Sasuke.” HELLO! He can’t really trust Sasuke, can he?! The guy’s one hell of a liar! (Sorry, but I’m not much of a believer of sex without love or affection.) . . . . Use that control, Naruto! Make Sasuke the victim! HELL YEAH! I love it when Naruto talks about “The first thing I will teach Sasuke.” But, um, if Naruto doesn’t do Sasuke, then Sasuke’ll just look for someone else to screw, so he’ll be getting sexual pleasure anyway. Either way, I hope Naruto triumphs in this.

Chapter 12: Hey, you got a beta! =D
Sounds like Gaara’s succeeding, Sasuke. . . . Interesting about the “jutsu racket.” . . . . (*snicker*) “There are no other solutions, jackass. Cooperate so I can go back home.” XD Tough shit, Sasuke. . . . Oooooh, ouch. Good one, Gaara, stick it to him. >:D . . . . So Ino was the missing-nin? Too bad, I like her; I think she’s funny. . . . Interesting idea about the motives for war. . . . Or so you think, Sasuke. Your behavior and the way you’ve treated him might just push him away. His hard streak has woken up, thanks to your actions, and he’s one of those people that can fight you to near exhaustion. He’s coming out on top (I hope). . . . Sasuke seems more worried about Naruto leaving him than of someone possibly taking Naruto away from him. Does he have some understanding that that is the more likely possibility? . . . . Oh boy, he’s totally lost it. . . . Heheh, I love this line: “In this state a genin could finish you off with one move. So, damn it, pull it together!” He’s got a point. . . . Hell YEAH, NEJI! The tranq! =D . . . . Interesting line: “Neji is far too . . . fair to understand men like us.” I like that one. ^_^ . . . . Please tell me that Gaara is just the concerned friend who wants what’s best for Naruto and that he doesn’t have any weird ideas. . . . Oh good. . . . What Sasuke doesn’t seem to realize is that he doesn’t necessarily have to lose Naruto “to anyone.” He might just lose him, period.
To your note to animehead: Seriously? “No angst?” That person must’ve read some seriously angsty fanfics in her day.

What an emotional rollercoaster
Great writing skills
update

Chapter 3: Interesting idea, “he doesn’t think to wake up.” . . . . Cool, he has to half-mask his chakra. . . . Naruto’s sudden fear of Sasuke’s chakra. Is this because Naruto’s scared of Sasuke in general? . . . . Interesting idea, “I can’t dirty him this way.” In other words, he’s more concerned about Shino’s scent rubbing off on Naruto than of Naruto actually noticing it? (He’s probably concerned about that too.) . . . . Sasuke hates liars. No, he hates it when someone lies to him Cuz he’s been doing a fair amount of lying lately, as well as his partners probably. . . . Ahhhh, so he was imagining Naruto! And it’s just bad luck that Naruto had to pick this night to check things out. . . . Sasuke has no clue that Naruto found out? . . . . Yikes. . . . It’s interesting how both guys are perceptive in some ways but oblivious in others. That’s human nature for you. And they’re both perceptive in ways the other probably wouldn’t think. . . . Jeez, Sasuke’s scary. . . . “He will learn or he will suffer.” And so will you, Sasuke. So will you.
“Sasuke’s rage?” Scary! o_o

Chapter 4: Shino’s kinda the problem, Sasuke, but you’re more of one. (*smirk*) . . . . I love how Sasuke’s mentally growling under his breath. Grrrr. =D . . . . Too bad, Sasuke. You should’ve seen this coming. . . . Sasuke doesn’t get that he’s the one Naruto’s afraid of most. . . . “I will not have you live in fear of any man.” So you’re not a man, Sasuke? =) I love this story! It’s excellently written! . . . . Hah! Sasuke’s panicking. (*smirk*) . . . . To bad, Sasuke. To some extent, you did want Shino. Otherwise you never would’ve gone there. . . . [to Sasuke] Dude! Shino hasn’t fucked up anything! You fucked it up! . . . . “Hn . . . but I am not anyone.” Sasuke thought that same thing in one of the first chapters of the manga, just before he fought Kakashi. And look who came out on top. . . . Okay, is Sasuke supposed to be invincible or something? How the hell did he make his chakra poisonous? õ_ô . . . . Sasuke couldn’t see that it was a clone? I guess rage can blind even the Sharingan. . . . Cool technique! It’s got Kabuto beat all right when it comes to regeneration or healing! =D . . . . Oh man, that’s so unfair! Sasuke obviously thinks he can do anything while Naruto can’t! Meeeeaaaannnnn!!
To your response to Goldie: So it is going to get better? I’m gonna hold you to that. >:D
To your response to Ursweetheartless: I totally agree about Sasuke being hot when he’s insane. He scares the shit out of me, but he’s still hot.
To your response to Sophie: I’m REALLY going to hold you to seeing this fic through to the end! It’s way too good to leave hanging! >:D

Chapter 5: And there’s the opening of the story. So this is where we’re at. . . . This is exciting, but chilling! (*frets with anticipation*) . . . . Intense dialogue, and I love the pauses. . . . (*shiver*) . . . . And all that deception of trust just goes zooming down the toilet, eh, Sasuke? . . . . Uh, whoopsie: “Naruto does put up any fight as I tie him to our bed.” You forgot the n’t in “doesn’t,” right? . . . . (*tremble*tremble*) . . . . (*SHIVER*) Sasuke’s scary. He’s apparently very good at making someone crave pleasure and pain together. . . . Holy jeez, what a cliffhanger! God, that chapter was short! Wow. o_o

Chapter 6: I’m just curious: Is the Kyuubi going to have a part in this story? Like maybe turn the tables on Sasuke or something? Sasuke knows about the Kyuubi, right?
“And my old ones – well, they never really cared anyway.” DENIAL! I refuse to believe that shit! ò_ó . . . . Interesting idea, “I am pain.” . . . . This is captivating. . . . Holy crap, another abrupt ending! What the hey! Are we ever going to get to it?! (*flail*flail*) >_<

Chapter 7: (*snicker*) “Sasuke laughing is just odd.” Yup. Love it. ^^ . . . . It’s weird, I keep trying to put myself in Naruto’s place during all this, but every time I try, I get the wild urge to just break out in giggles. Not that what you’re writing is funny at all, I think it’s just my nervousness and anticipation. (*sweat*) . . . . OW! Shit! >.< . . . . Normally I hate this kind of thing. But you make it enjoyable. I’m not a sadist or a masochist, but this . . . I dunno, there’s an art to this. Believe it or not, it’s not as bad as one would think. Maybe I’m just in a good mood right now, who knows? Either way, I’m liking it. . . . I notice that you censored “fucking.” You hadn’t before. I wonder why now; what’s the significance? . . . . Clever. “I don’t move away. I am too afraid to move.” Most people would have him flinch away or even move closer in craving, but you made this different. I like it. =) . . . . MAN, YOU ARE LIKE THE QUEEN OF S/M OR SOMETHING! YOU TOTALLY TURN THIS INTO A SICK, ENTICING FORM OF ART! I SWEAR! O_O

Chapter 2: First, your disclaimer: “I am writing this for fun.” (*shivers*) Scary.
Duh, Sasuke’s watching. I wonder if he’ll follow them. . . . Wow. Shino’s got nerve to betray Sasuke like that. . . . If I’m not putting a lot of sentences in, it’s because I’m absorbed in the story. . . . Whoa, that’s a cool question: “How can you want something you already have?” Does that mean that once Sasuke has Naruto he won’t want him anymore? That’ll just end up in a circle, cuz if he loses Naruto he’ll want him again. . . . Oh, wait. Shino just answered my question. This is a really good dialogue. . . . Wait a minute. No one else believes in love? What the fuck! . . . . Yeah, really, why shouldn’t he break Sasuke? . . . . “What would he do to me?” The point is, Naruto, is that you don’t let him do anything to you. That’s the point. . . . “Do not make your life a living hell if you don’t have to.” Yeah, right, apparently it already is just that. God, that’s a scary thought, to think that it can get much worse. . . . Ooh, love this line! “You have no idea how deep the waters are that you are swimming in.” Awesome! I’m gonna remember that one! =D
Okay! This chapter went way better than I had imagined!
To one of the review responses: SasuNaruSasu? So Naruto’s going to do Sasuke at some point? Goodie! =D . . . .

(I review as I read.)
First of all, I really want to read this fic despite all the dark warnings. But I’d have to be in the right mood for it, so reviews might be slow in coming.

Prologue: Nice beginning. It caught my attention.
Wow, there’s a lot of tension in this scene. I like it. . . . 4 years? Jeezus, that takes dedication. But I guess when Sasuke sets his mind to something, he can go about it for years. You write really well, by the way. . . . I love the obsessed-possessive character; ever read Ceres: Celestial Legend? My favorite character happens to be like that. . . . “Can’t let it go.” Let what go, I wonder? . . . . Oh. My. God. (*stares*) And Sasuke wants him, but . . . I can see his problem. And Naruto’s. . . . Yeah, Orochimaru deserved it. . . . Wow. I love Sasuke’s description of vengeance. Really cool. . . . Holy -- shit! That had to take a TON of patience! And I thought Itachi was scary! (*shudders*) He’s got nothing on his brother. . . . Wait. Orochimaru waited for him? What happened then? And 4 times? Jeezus Christ! O_O . . . . “Even long after he was dead?” That’s sick. That’s -- totally -- sick. I wonder how Tsunade looked at Sasuke knowing all this stuff. . . . Ewww, gross. Sorry, my mold hasn’t cracked so far as Shikamaru! XP . . . . Gawd, Sasuke is evil! . . . What the fuck? Female organs that were fully functional? õ_ô . . . . Okay, I’m glad that Sasuke’s motives changed. . . . Oh man, Shino; that’s waaaay worse than Shikamaru. I’ll never get the hang of the idea of Shino. (*violent shudders*) . . . . Oooooh, that’s scary. I get the feeling that this fic is NOT going to end happy. Even so, I’ll still state my hopeless wish here: that it ends up better than I would think. >.< But you’re a really good writer