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for Breaking Apart

by cloudydayz

person kaa-san
schedule March 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Are you sure honesty kept Sasuke sane? Can't wait for your next update.^^
person purplekitty
schedule March 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Ah another greta chapter! What's gonna happen next? How's Shino goona react to Sasuke's decision? Is Sasuke gonna find out Naruto knows? What's gonna happen to Naruto? Who drank my smoothie!?!? The anticipation is killing me^^
person dana
schedule March 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
wow great chapter. i like how we saw what happened through sasuke and naruto's pov of the same events. like how sasuke was seeming oblivious to naruto but knew he was lying and how naruto seems oblivious to sasuke's secret life both knowing something is up but still continuing to play the role. is naruto going to be the one who is pregnant and will it be sasuke's because from what i've seen of your version of uchihas they shouldn't have no kids (by the way loved the way you described the bloodbath). can't wait til the next update.
schedule March 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Sadistic Sasuke, Possesive Sasuke, Obsessive Sasuke...*jumps up and down and claps happily whiles going into a fan-screaming fit* My three favaourite things! Whooooooooooooo!!! Bring on the bastard-ness...ness! lol I'm being stupid, ignore me...but acknowledge my review!! I love this story, I can't wait till Naruto wises up and leaves Sasuke because I like it when he gets all crazy raging maddy-like and all "Naruto-Is-Mine" and "If-I-can't-have-him-no-one-can!" aggressiveness!! Hurry and update pleeease!! Thanks for updating twice in one day!

But you gotta update again!

Ki`Tara
person Damp
schedule March 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Possession is having some degree of control over something else. Generally, to possess something, a person must have an intention to possess it. A person may be in possession of some property (although possession does not always imply ownership). Like ownership, the possession of things is commonly regulated by states under property law. Languages have several means to indicate possession. I got that from dictionary . com , and you Sasuke have just crossed the line by saying that Naruto was you possesion...and not your lover...die Sasuke...
schedule March 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Personally I love it when a writer takes the time to answer reviews. I never really take the time, but over at fanfiction.net they have the niffty little review reply thing, so I do reply to any ones that have questions, people I know, or one that catches my eye.

I'm so very happy you updated, this really was a great treat to come home to after a hard day at work! Thank you SO much~!

person celticfx
schedule March 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Thank you for such a speedy update! Wow, there was a lot to take in this chapter. I kept wanting Naruto to punch Shino, but then, we all would've missed out on their enlightening conversation. Things just keep getting more and more interesting! I wonder if Naruto will have any run-ins with Sasuke's other lovers? I can't wait to see how Naruto acts around Sasuke now that he and Shino have had their talk. Either way, keep up the great work! I look forward to your next update! ^_^
schedule March 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Can I just say this...very few writers can do what you do. You hold such power in your chapters, in your words. I read chapter two the other day. I read it and moved on...but then it came back to me. I could recall the chapter as if it were right in front of me. Your story stays within the mind of the people who read them, some say I have the same gift...I'm not too sure. Yet, you are very gifted and I hope to see you grow and write many more things. This chapter was not a disappoint. I'm glad Naruto got some insight, small as it might have been. I too fear for Naruto, Sasuke could cause him such harm, and I think Naruto would allow it, because his love runs so deep for him. Wonderful written and I look forward to your next chapter.
person Shosuro
schedule March 2, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Damn, that was some dark stuff. I really like the twistedness of the story.
I kinda want to know what kind of stress or what was going through your mind in order to give us such a twisted fiction? I hope that you update soon....maybe tomorrow....or that too soon?.....damn I think I am just Jonesing for a good story!
schedule March 2, 2007 at 12:00 AM
oh sasuke, you freaking mental case! >.< sigh and /shino/? i don't have anything against him really, but dag yo, has he really slept with everyone else? because shino wouldn't be at the top of my list... poor poor naruto, both of them are crackedand broken. good job