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You made me cry throughout that whole chapter!!!

Again those characterisations are so in-depth. It's weird there were often times where I thought you got them mixed up - attributed to Sasuke what is in my eye inherently a Naruto characteristic, then you blurred the lines until now where I finally get it.

Brute strength vs pure force of will. They are interchangeable they see in each other what they are. Naruto talking about Sasuke's hope...that line clobbered me! I never understood Sasuke like that yet it is Naruto's hope in him isn't it? Or is it Naruto's own unique hope that he can delve that out of Sasuke who does not realise what hope is let alone he exudes it for Naruto ... lol

I have never read smut like this, I realise I'm crying but I'm crying for them too...and they are so stupid! Do I gather Sasuke already knows Naruto's plan by his one night line and the DOBE doesn't know Sasuke knows?

Obviously I didn't review the past chapters because I LOVE NEJI but I was getting mighty jealous of his new bond with Sasuke and Sasuke eyeing him, that stupid Sasuke. Sasuke is one sick teme and gosh their symmetry is so bloody ... well angsty! They both recognise the instability in the other's mental processes.

Okay onto the next chapter

Oh no!!! Sasuke still sounds so unbalanced, I guessed right in the last chapter and Naruto is still so darned oblivious at times!

So Sasuke hates Naruto for being weak eh? He detests all that time he nursed him? Sasuke is a psycho kljasdfjasjdfajsdfkl!!! HELLO he ravished the whole village with his sexual exploits and razed another to the ground. He is proud of having done that for Naruto but not the care he exerted on him, it makes me so sad and fearful of him and Naruto needs reprieve from that.

I would have thought Sasuke'd have hated Naruto for what was being done to him, as though illogical, is usually how one takes to such a problem - you know denial, anger etc before acceptance but I did not think he hated Naruto for the result of his torment :( and to think he lauds "taking care" of him as some sort of ownership over Naruto? It still gratingly peeves me off!

I hope Naruto gets away, Sasuke suffers slowly and painfully lol and then voila Naruto comes back and heals him. It also worries me that Sasuke still associates sex with care well you know what I mean... I hope

Oh gosh this fic is one of those heady heavy ones and I hope upon hope you update soon :)

Hey, cloudy! SasuNaru723 here, aka Kariko. Just wondering how the updating process of Breaking Apart is going as well as how life’s been treating you for this winter. Also saying hello and I still wish you the best of luck in getting Chapter 19 posted soon! ^_^

~Kariko~

Hey, just wondering when you are updating this...before thanksgiving? Christmas? ever? It just seems like this is about to join the ranks of the multitude of discontinued fics which would be disappointing because you have such a unique prespective and fresh vision.

Thank you for the wake up. Your clarity and reasoning, the details and the ritual have made this 'verse (and ours) so much richer.I'm impressed by your voice.Sasuke and Neji do shine together.I wonder if this is what clans really do (did) or this is an entire fiction , either way its fascinating.

Thanks for letting me know that you had updated. I hope you keep telling me in the future. I just returned for a two weeks vacation from Mexico and didnt have had time to check my email. About this chapter, I find the tone of the story changing, e. i., Sasuke inner monologue. I will just hold to what comes next and then comment further. Anyway, thanks again!

Sincerely

Moonmoore

I really like how you layer the story and how the plot is flushed out with each chapter. I find Sasuke's insistence to give Naruto whatever he needs contradicted with his unwillingness to let him go. I can't wait for the next chapter and am especially excited for the reappearance of Gaara. Please update this soon!

Great chapter. Hope the next one does not take as long.

Chapter 17: Wow. Been awhile, hasn’t it?
Sasuke’s POV this time. (*still hoping for revenge on the guy*) ____ So Orochimaru’s where he gets it from. ____ I like that bit about how he hated himself. ____ He’s wondering what’s going on; he should know—he screwed up big time. ____ “Damn near killed me,” yeah right. So dramatic. ____ Gotta say: you’re still writing beautifully, cloudydayz. =) ____ Funny, him thinking that Naruto was using him. ô_ô ____ That’s a cool line: “I have honed my ability to tell lies with my body.” ____ What’s entertaining is that both Sasuke and Naruto are so certain in their beliefs of the future that it really makes me wonder which is going to end up proved false. I hope it’s Sasuke. ____ Hehehe, I like this part: “‘He will always want me,’ I think smugly, ‘He’s addicted to me and he doesn’t even know it.’” I wonder when in the story Sasuke’ll realize that he had it backwards. ____ “It feels . . . good. Better than good.’ Naruto’s plan is working then. =) ____ “‘No, dobe, I am not weak.’” Says the guy who needs to prove to himself that his dick still works by testing it with everybody. ____ (*sigh*) So not fair how he looks so damn good when he’s so damn evil. Never thought I’d hate my passion for Sasuke until I read this story. That sonofabitch. ____ Love Sasuke’s perception on the answer to Neji’s questions. I really really hope that Sasuke’ll be able to heal in this. (???) Wait a minute. What did I just say? . . . Oh my God, I’m beginning to see Sasuke as a victim, too. But . . . he’s committing such evil . . and enjoying it. How. . . ? Wow. All of a sudden, I’m seeing this story from a new angle. O_O ____ Naruto’s charm is beginning to work on Sasuke. Your writing, cloudydayz, really grips me. It’s beautiful and agonizing and has so many dimensions to it. ____ I’m at “My world is broken,” and I’ve loved everything I’ve read. It’s wild how this writing can truly mix love and hate together. If someone were to say “it’s wonderful,” the word “horrible” would come to mind; and if they were to say “it’s hideous,” we’d think “beautiful.” And vice-versa for everything. We really can’t tell where the beauty ends and the ugliness begins. And that makes the writing phenomenal. I’ve never been so sadly confused when reading a story. This really is a story for stress relief; it makes me want to cry and rage, but it feels good to let that feeling out. ____ Love how Sasuke’s studying Naruto’s body. You write beautiful physical descriptions, and I love the comparison between him and Sasuke. ____ “I bask in the realization that I am Naruto’s and he is mine.” Strangely he’s right. And, like everything else in this story, at the same time he’s wrong: they belong to no one, not even each other. It’s the balance, baby, the balance. Yin & Yang and all that.

Very beautifully done. Thanks for updating. MORE!! XDD And END HAPPY-HAPPY (not sad/angry-happy)!!

Ooh, I am so glad you updated! I was worried that you were planning to stop writing this. And this was an interesting chapter, finding out what's going on in Sasuke's head. I really, really, really hope he gets what's coming to him. Naruto deserves so much better, especially now that he's recovering finally. Lol, I really want Sasuke to suffer.

Thank you for the chapter. I'm looking forward to your next update.