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sasuke will never cece to scare me and neither will naruto with disturbing me in his twistend decisions but its all in a fasinating way,hope you can update soon

I just reread the chapter and caught this part I didn't notice before... “I know your terms. And still I couldn’t resist this, even if it is just for one night.”
So does that mean Sasuke knows Naruto is going to leave him? I can't wait for the next chapter... I have to see how this plays out. Its like a soap opera but actually intelligent, sharp, and teeming with darkness ^_^ Update soon!

I usually never review, but I had too. I love your story, I hope in any future chapters Garaa will pair up with Naruto for a little bit. I think GaraXNaru are cute together too.

Chapter 13: (*snicker*) “Except for the ever-present ‘drop dead’ vibe he gives me.” XD “Yeah, I hate you too.” XDD . . . . So Hinata’s got more of an authoritative presence? Hmm, not sure if I approve, but okay. . . . Interesting portrayal of Neji. . . . Sasuke’s seriously not considering that he might have less to fear of someone getting “in between them” than it actually just breaking? (. . . Saying that reminds me of the title of this fic. Is that only in relation to Naruto’s psyche, I wonder?) . . . . Oh, that makes sense! “Exposing Neji [. . .] chakra signature [. . .] more deadly.” =D . . . . Yeah, well, too bad you had no control when it came to the other ninja, Sasuke. (*smirk*) Sucker. (Sorry about the character bashing, but Sasuke seriously pisses me off in this fic. He deserves everything I dish out.) . . . . Awesome depiction of Neji. . . . Hell, yeah! Cool metaphor! “They’re like night and day, but they represent the exact same day, just different sides of it.” =D . . . . Oh no, Sasuke. No. You betrayed Naruto waaay more than you believe. Sex with Neji wouldn’t’ve betrayed Naruto any more; it would’ve betrayed yourself. . . . LOL, “Because, let’s face it: as my partner, seven out of every ten problems he has in life are caused by me.” XDDD I totally believe it! Even if Sasuke were in another fic or just the regular manga, I always call him a “pain in the ass to everyone who encounters him, including his creator!” As Zrina said in The Sound of Dreams, “Issues are standard packaging.” XDDD . . . . Ohhh, good one, Neji! “You mean you’re not ready. Naruto’s been ready for months.” =D . . . . Sasuke doesn’t want to admit that those are his problems more so than Naruto’s. . . . “Either way, I am so close to losing Naruto, my Naruto.” Because of you, Sasuke, because of you. (I’m probably not gonna let up on him.) . . . . “Clan speech?!” CLEVER! I LIKE THAT! I’M GONNA REMEMBER THAT!! =DDD . . . . I’m gonna go over this again later. How long have you thought this out, this thing about clans? I love it! =D . . . . Oh, wow, that’s so cool, about Sasuke begging for mercy = stop my heartbeat. And instead Itachi let him live = killed him. (*shakes head in wonder*) That is amazing. And not everyone could’ve explained that half so well as you have. . . . And you once again bring in different “languages.” Cool. . . . Awesome contrast between “slave” and “child.” Man, you’re good! . . . . I think this is my favorite chapter so far. . . . Neji, I love you. I love you like I have never loved you before. (*gazes in awe*) . . . . Yes, yes, yes, YES, NEJI! DO IT!! (*reading the “Should I” paragraph.*) . . . . Yeah, go home, Sasuke. I wonder what he’ll find there.

Chapter 14: Boy, I’d love to see Sasuke like this. . . . See? See what you’ve done with your philandering, Sasuke? See? He’s not going to trust you as much as he did before (which wasn’t all that much, really). . . . “Equal,” huh? Better, but you seriously ought to be “superior.” He has it coming. . . . F*** you, Tsunade. ..;.. . . . . Yeah, seriously, Tsunade. What are you thinking, making Sasuke a hunter? You outta your f***in mind? . . . . I thought ANBU were hunter-nin in a sense. I like your description of what Hunter-nin are, but that sounds also like ANBU. What’s the difference? . . . . Whoa, is Naruto serious? If he’s not, I hope to God he’s being really careful here; he’s playing with cave lions and fire with gasoline here. But at the same time, I’m totally cheering him on. >:D . . . . Heh. I’m starting to read the dialogue out loud; a sign that I’m really enjoying it. (*grins*) . . . . “But you fucked that up by fucking everyone else.” I couldn’t’ve put it better myself! >:D . . . . Oh, please tell me Sasuke just put the clamps on himself. . . . Cool. Naruto = peace, Sasuke = war, Neji = mediator. . . . Please tell me Naruto will triumph and Sasuke will fall. Please. >.<

Chapter 15: Oh no. Please don’t tell me that he’s going to figure out that Naruto just let himself be captured. Or maybe that’ll be a good idea; maybe it’ll scare Sasuke (doubt it, though). . . . Heh. Sucker.
You are so right about Sasuke, Naruto. . . . Aw, shit! I want REVENNNNGE!
Oh boy, storm incoming. . . . Ehhheheheheheh, he’s been wat-ching-youuuu, Saaaaa-sukeeeeeee. >:D . . . . I’m glad he feels sick. He deserves so much pain. (I think I said before I’m not a sadist, but this is justice.) . . . . I love the drama that’s built up near the end of this segment. And then the emphasis on that question at the end.
That’s a cool idea about Kabuto: “He was so fascinated by anything foreign and new.” Makes a lot of sense, too. . . . Oh, so that’s the reason why Naruto had the ability to have children. Okay. I’m still a little WTFish about that part of the story, but okay. . . . Love the way Sasuke described what he did to Orochimaru and I love Naruto’s reaction and his growing realization that Sasuke’s crazy. . . . That’s cool. “Why does that make me feel so powerful?” . . . . You know, I’d kind of like to see the scene in possibly a sidestory of Sasuke raping Orochimaru; how he caught Orochimaru, how Orochimaru reacted through the whole ordeal, what he was seeing in his mind when Sasuke put the genjutsu on him. . . . Heh, understatement of the year, Naruto. ^^ . . . . Although it is kind of gruesome how they’re both laughing about how one of them raped and tortured some guy to death (whether he deserved it or not). (*nervous giggles*) . . . . Oh boy, oh boy, Sasuke’s finally feeling love, and it’s right before it’s all going to go to hell (from what it looks like). I’m not sure if I want that to happen or not. Like I said, I’m a megabeliever in justice and revenge, and I want Sasuke to hurt a lot for what he’s done to Naruto. In fact, I want him to suffer so much, I don’t think I’ll ever be satisfied. He’ll have to un-fuck everybody so that they’re virgins as far as he’s concerned for me to be totally satisfied. (At least all the people I know. Every. Single. One. Of. Them.)
To your response to Sealink: I believe that you’re normal. If someone has weird thoughts or plots in their head doesn’t make them sick or weird or whatever. It’s what we act upon that makes us truly in need of help. ;)
To your response to Sunlight159: Sucker for happy endings, eh? I’ll be counting on that bit. ;)
To your response to Anon: “Besides, slightly insane people need love too.” Slightly! You call this (*points to story above* 9_9) SLIGHTLY?!?

Chapter 16: Love the whole paragraph, “I have to admit, a contemplative Sasuke [. . .] not really.” =) . . . . Heh. Love the paragraph about Sasuke’s curiosity. It might just kill him one of these days. . . . Mannnn, this description is awwwwesommme. . . . Come ONNNNN, NARUTO! Don’t wimp out on this! FIGHT THIS MOTHERF***ING SONOFABITCH!! HE DESERVES, OH, SO MUCH PAIN! (I can’t believe I’m saying this about my favorite character in the manga! õ_ô) . . . . Hmm, maybe justice is still forthcoming after all. I just hope Naruto sticks to the plan to leave Sasuke. That’ll be what clinches it. . . . “He shifts his face so that his ear is pressed to the side of my neck.” That’d make an awesome fanart. . . . He so deserves pain. Un-fuck everyone, Sasuke, and maybe I’ll forgive you. (Don’t let my tastes keep you from your path, though, cloudydayz. This fic has reached some major emotions in me.) . . . . Boy, that’s some charm you’ve turned on; even I feel drowsy and content. Mmmm. . . . I don’t know how Naruto can just put away angst and remorse like this; I could never do that. Once I remember, it stays until I forget about it. . . . “And I never go back on a promise.” Not sure what to make of that. I like it, but I’m not sure if I want to hold Naruto to that or not. Only if he’ll benefit from it in a good way. . . . Heh. “Naw, that bastard will have the rest of his life to sleep.” Yeah, uneasy sleep. . . . That’s funny, Naruto enticing Sasuke. Love it. ^^ . . . . Sasuke’s really going to miss this, isn’t he? Makes me almost feel sorry for him. Almost. But not enough. I’m not softening like I usually do. . . . Cool, element analogies. ;) . . . . Ohhhh mannnn, love that description of Sasuke. (*blush*) You couldn’t’ve put that description in a happier fic, goddammit? T_T . . . . (*BLUSH*) (I’m gonna have a seizure if this keeps up.) Man, that’s erotic. . . . This is scene is amazingly sensual. I love it. . . . Love the whole humming thing.
Oh, GodDAMMIT! You just HAD to leave it there, didn’t you! Arrrgh!! D= Not coooool. . . . (*groans*) >.< I’m gonna have to reread this next time I wanna review. And while I don’t mind rereading it, I won’t be able to read it in the same mood you’ve set now! T_T
To the A/N: Okay, I can understand your intent of not wanting to rush it. That’s cool. . . . But STILLLLLLL!! T_T T_T T_T

Chapter 8: I totally forgot this was unbetaed. It’s damn good for something unbetaed.
Yup, Sasuke knows about the Kyuubi. But what the hell is this about a deal? . . . . (*shiver*shiver*) Mean, mean, Sasuke’s so mean. No wonder no one said no to him, he’s fucking good at this! (‘Scuse my swearing.) . . . . Now we get into D/s. Cool. That’s another one I’m iffy on, but you brought it in well. Only this is probably kind of illegal (like Sasuke cares). It’s kind of a paradox: real D/s is more like a game, while this D/s is more real; this doesn’t have the advantage of safewords. . . . “Interesting response?” Perhaps, Sasuke, perhaps. But not unexpected. The guy’s totally confused. . . . (*snicker*) I’m totally captivated. Funny thing is, I’m listening to “Coldhearted Snake” while I’m reading this. It might be helping me not sink into the black hole of despair. But I’m really enjoying this story. . . . He’s one hell of a seducer. . . . Sasuke likes blood, does he? . . . . “Your neck?” DANG! Does that mean deep-throating or just rubbing against his neck?! o_o . . . . Oh yeah, I like this part. (*droooool*) . . . . You slurred his words really well. I’ve never seen slurred words look so pretty or hot, I swear. . . . Huh? “[. . .] what feels like heaven could quickly turn into hell.” How so? . . . . Believe it or not, they both seem a little more lighthearted right now: Naruto’s challenging Sasuke, and Sasuke’s amused. . . . Hey, um, you described Naruto’s d*** just now. But you did that earlier, and the descriptions don’t match. (*checks back*) Yeah, chapter 5: You said “2 inches in diameter.” Now it’s 3 and 1/2 inches in diameter.” õ_ô . . . . So how big is Sasuke then, if you don’t mind me asking? . . . . Wow, that scene was awesome. For a second there near the end I thought, “How’s Naruto stroking Sasuke’s hair? I thought he was tied up!” But you caught that. ^_^ This chapter ended surprisingly sweeter than I would’ve imagined.
To the response to tiger-lily: SERIOUSLY?! He’s not?! Awesome! =D

Chapter 9: “I didn’t know that he could purr like this.” Cute. ^^ . . . . I like Naruto’s thoughts; they’re interesting. . . . All of Naruto’s thoughts were interesting. I was so absorbed in them that I couldn’t point out little things. I like this dialogue afterwards too. . . . Huh? Payback for what? Man, he’s mean. . . . Ewww, Shikamaru and Neji? I’m not yet ready for that. XP . . . . Oh, it is so your fault, Sasuke! . . . . This is cool. Naruto’s reactions to everything in this kind of surprised me, but you caught that and made it work.
To the response to animehead: Can you write lighter stuff that’s not necessarily fluff? I mean something with dark elements but also light elements? The Sound of Dreams by Zrina has a good mixture of those, I think.
To the response to Kativachan: Shikamaru and Neji? Thanks for warning me.
To the response to SharinganEyes: Cool how it might take a while for Sasuke to get his control back with a big IF. Maybe that’ll teach him something.

Chapter 10: Right from the start, this is interesting. Once again, I don’t know if I’ll be able to put in as many comments as I usually do, because I need to concentrate on the story. . . . “In the wrong order.” Clever. =D . . . . Oh, HELL YEAH! Naruto makes a comeback! >:D . . . . Oh wow, that’s a totally clever idea! To let themselves get captured! Awright! =D . . . . This whole scene was done really well. It covers everything and you didn’t even use the flashback technique. . . . So Naruto doesn’t know that Sasuke had no clue for 3 weeks? I wonder if Naruto’s ever going to find that out. . . . Hm? What’s this? “I have been avoiding and, at times, failing to avoid rape since I was five years old.” How the hell? . . . . As I’ve heard in a play once: “One should rather die than be betrayed. There is no deceit in death. It delivers precisely what it has promised. Betrayal, though . . . betrayal is the willful slaughter of hope.” ~ Steven Dietz . . . . “He broke me to remake me.” Actually at first it was just the opposite, wasn’t it? “Sasuke remade Naruto to break him.” Until his intents changed. . . . Interesting how Naruto is only now realizing that Sasuke’s actually living there, not just visiting a lot. . . . Heheheheh, Sasuke, you better watch out, cuz he’s maaaad at choo. XD I liked this chapter! And, eheheh, I guess I ended up putting more comments than I thought I would. ^_^; That was pretty good planning executing! It wasn’t too farfetched and extreme, and at the same time there was enough surprise to keep me excited. Good job. ^_^ I hope to hear some more stuff from Sasuke’s POV as well.