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for When He Comes

by GoldenSensei

person dana
schedule April 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
i don't know what number review i am for this chapter but biznatch #5 (fav. number) reporting for duty. i think this was another super chapter. i think you have a nice flow to your story so far and you can't tell it's not beta'd so don't worry about it because i think you are doing fine. can't wait for the next chapter. by nthe way is sasuke going to have any interesting competition like say sai or gaara.
schedule April 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
YAY!!!! *giggles* i love those two. Love reading happy stories . Is there going to be more?
person Eternel
schedule April 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
voyerism is one of my favorites lol. Okay they were only being watched while they kissed but still, it was good. I'm glad you decided to keep writing this story, I really do like it a lot and can't wait to read more.
person Saiou-chan
schedule April 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
AIIIIIIIIIIEEEEEEEEEE! NOT THERE, NOT THERE! UPDATE ASAP I WANT MORE!
person emp78
schedule April 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Will there be a lemon in the next chapter? That was great. Sasuke had to practically spell it out for Naruto. Update!
schedule April 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Oh, very nicely done! Can't wait for the update!
person Anon
schedule April 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
(squeals!) hmm too cute! please update soon!
schedule April 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
more, more, more! pleeeeaaassssssssseee!!!!!!!!!
more!!!!!!!!!

this is so hot!

great story line going!
i love this!
schedule April 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Great story so far!! I love Naruto's command of wind chakra too. I can see him being able to do this in the manga. ;)
person Anon
schedule April 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Woah!! Did not see that coming?! Hurry with the next chapter!!!