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May 2, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Well as I said before things are really getting insteresting.
When I was reading this it reminded me of some other stories that go by the name of Master PC on a site that goes by the name http://www.mcstories.com/, and one story on mediaminer.org that goes by the name Master PC Ranma 1/2 quite insteresting you might want to read them some time they might be able to give you some ideas when ever you need them.
After saying that it makes me wounder what would happen if Naruto got his hands on a Master PC, and what will he do with it?
O by the way not bad work, and you don't need to keep saying your sorry all the time, because as you said before this is an AU FAN-FACTION AFTER ALL AND YOU ALREADY SAID THAT YOUR SORRY.
Well till next time latter.
When I was reading this it reminded me of some other stories that go by the name of Master PC on a site that goes by the name http://www.mcstories.com/, and one story on mediaminer.org that goes by the name Master PC Ranma 1/2 quite insteresting you might want to read them some time they might be able to give you some ideas when ever you need them.
After saying that it makes me wounder what would happen if Naruto got his hands on a Master PC, and what will he do with it?
O by the way not bad work, and you don't need to keep saying your sorry all the time, because as you said before this is an AU FAN-FACTION AFTER ALL AND YOU ALREADY SAID THAT YOUR SORRY.
Well till next time latter.
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May 2, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Once again, I say happy ending, where Sakura remembers but likes that it was Naruto in some strange way! NaruSaku! And Ino in Shippuuden doesn't act like that, cause she's nicer in Shippuden, but it's your story! And thank god it doesn't work on men, that would just turn me off!
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May 2, 2007 at 12:00 AM
loved it keep it up
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May 1, 2007 at 12:00 AM
the story is good so far but how aobut the more girls he used the justu on the more they start to think as one person u no like the start to get a cloletive mind i mean the still are sepreat people but the first slave becomes like the head mind that thinks for the others when it comes to there master
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May 1, 2007 at 12:00 AM
SLAVE 'EM ALL!! At least the girls who aren't attached. Now if the slave jutsu could work on anyone, imagine the chaos he could cause. Does the Fox have control over plants or something it could use to get the whole situation really twisted? This has got some awesome potential to be a really naughty fic. I can't wait to see more.
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May 1, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Quite a good fic, keep up the good work! :D~~~~~.
As for the direction of the story, well... I'm personally for something of a mix of the "angsty and fluffy bunny" thing. I like a happy ending in general, after all XD. But that's not to say that the path to such an should be easily attined, quite the opposite. After all, this IS against the will of the girls, whichever of them that has come or are yet to come, after all, even if it is under the Kyuubi's influence. Which means that there should be some consequences of the whole thing for Naruto - but also forgiveness as well, to a certain extent. So... For now I would say that you should keep Naruto going around having his "fun" under the influence of Kyuubi. But at some point, there should be a confontation between Naruto and the Kyuubi - unless you intend to have Naruto controlled by the Kyuubi thorugh the whole story or have them completely merged into one by the end of the story. Point is though that if Naruto regains complette control later in the story (through whatever means; either him defeating the Kyuubi in an inner battle and regain control, makes some del with him, or is simply "stopped" by another character who uses some sort of jutsu to force the Kyuubi to release his influence), then that's when there should be consequneces for him, because of the fact that once he's back to normal/himself, then the girls should be released from the jutsu (if nothing else so because that it's hard to see why a completely in-character Naruto would want to control the girls - he's far too nice for that, as we know). The consequences could vary; some of the girls might find out that they're pregnant (a natural outcome of sexual intercoruse, at least :p), some of them might hate Naruto for it all, others just be confused and the like... And Tsunade might have to impose some punishment on Naruto, if for nothing else, so because of the fact that he learnt a strictly forbidden jutsu. And so on. Shouldn't be all angsty though; most of the girls should eventually forgive Naruto - especially so for Sakura and things straighten out in the end - or that's how I'd like it to be :p :D.
As for pairings, well; don't have much of an opinion here, so do as you wish here. Whether you want to make it into a Naruto/Harem fic or not is all your decision. Through if not, it'd still be nice if at least one or more girls besides the one he'd end up with at the end stayed with Naruto or became soemthing of a constant bed-companion or the like - for example, if Sakura were to be the one he'd end up with, it'd be sorta funny - ironic, even - to see Ino getting into it too and start to comptete with her for Naruto's attention, having gained a new perspective on him after the events about to come. Or something :).
Anyway, do your best! As others have been saying, it has great potential and I'll be watching it's future progress with great interest! :D
On a sidenote, I was a bit surpised about Ino's reaction in this chapter - quite OOC for her if you ask me - but then, again, she might just've had a bad morning and was thus in a bad mood, or it's THAT time of the month for her making her act like that against most people XD.
As for the direction of the story, well... I'm personally for something of a mix of the "angsty and fluffy bunny" thing. I like a happy ending in general, after all XD. But that's not to say that the path to such an should be easily attined, quite the opposite. After all, this IS against the will of the girls, whichever of them that has come or are yet to come, after all, even if it is under the Kyuubi's influence. Which means that there should be some consequences of the whole thing for Naruto - but also forgiveness as well, to a certain extent. So... For now I would say that you should keep Naruto going around having his "fun" under the influence of Kyuubi. But at some point, there should be a confontation between Naruto and the Kyuubi - unless you intend to have Naruto controlled by the Kyuubi thorugh the whole story or have them completely merged into one by the end of the story. Point is though that if Naruto regains complette control later in the story (through whatever means; either him defeating the Kyuubi in an inner battle and regain control, makes some del with him, or is simply "stopped" by another character who uses some sort of jutsu to force the Kyuubi to release his influence), then that's when there should be consequneces for him, because of the fact that once he's back to normal/himself, then the girls should be released from the jutsu (if nothing else so because that it's hard to see why a completely in-character Naruto would want to control the girls - he's far too nice for that, as we know). The consequences could vary; some of the girls might find out that they're pregnant (a natural outcome of sexual intercoruse, at least :p), some of them might hate Naruto for it all, others just be confused and the like... And Tsunade might have to impose some punishment on Naruto, if for nothing else, so because of the fact that he learnt a strictly forbidden jutsu. And so on. Shouldn't be all angsty though; most of the girls should eventually forgive Naruto - especially so for Sakura and things straighten out in the end - or that's how I'd like it to be :p :D.
As for pairings, well; don't have much of an opinion here, so do as you wish here. Whether you want to make it into a Naruto/Harem fic or not is all your decision. Through if not, it'd still be nice if at least one or more girls besides the one he'd end up with at the end stayed with Naruto or became soemthing of a constant bed-companion or the like - for example, if Sakura were to be the one he'd end up with, it'd be sorta funny - ironic, even - to see Ino getting into it too and start to comptete with her for Naruto's attention, having gained a new perspective on him after the events about to come. Or something :).
Anyway, do your best! As others have been saying, it has great potential and I'll be watching it's future progress with great interest! :D
On a sidenote, I was a bit surpised about Ino's reaction in this chapter - quite OOC for her if you ask me - but then, again, she might just've had a bad morning and was thus in a bad mood, or it's THAT time of the month for her making her act like that against most people XD.
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April 30, 2007 at 12:00 AM
great job.... want more! fluffy ending please with naruto hooked up with as many woman as possable! he desrives to be happy!!!
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April 30, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Pair all the girls off and have them serve Naruto forever. You should add some older chicks and some girls that are already dating some other guys to show his corruption.
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April 30, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Loving the story. As for your decision I have to say a bit more on the angsty side. Does Naruto deserve some loving after his troubled life? Of course, but let's not forget this is still against a woman's will. The kyuubi is obviously looking to take comlpete control of Naruto. So I suggest a comfrontation between Naruto and the kyuubi. Then if you wish to go fluff you can have Naruto win or compromise with the fox, or go darker and have kyuubi win or be defeated only to leave Naruto to leave Naruto to the fate of the girls and the townspeople. Whatever you do I'm sure it'll be good.
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April 30, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Why not make this into a Naruto harem... Then he could be happy while the fox is just a lust filled demon and a bad demon in general... keep up the writings