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This is a really good fic. I would truly love to see more of it. I like the unexpected plot. Hope to see more soon.

I want to start off by saying that I realy like your writing style. I like how you've developed the plot thus far, and look forward to how you are planning to develop it in future chapters. I like Naruto and Sasuke's characterization. Awesomely awesome.

I have, however, stumbled across a few things the detracted from the fic. There were a few misspelling of words, like 'deserve' in chapter two, I think, and some Japanese terms. I'm a Japanese nut so I hope you don't take any of this as if I were picking on you because I'm not =( I just want to inform you of some things in case you weren't aware of them already. The hidden village Naruto and Sasuke are from is called Konoha (you were spelling it 'Kohana'), "Is that so?" (or something similar) is actually spelled "Sou ka" and "sorry" is spelled "gomen".

In chapter three, the last paragraph, I ran into a little confusion. In Naruto's Pov the following was written: No. They were friends. Naruto found it almost laughable that Sasuke had assumed they were. But, unexpectedly, that same notion also broke his heart. They weren't friends, they hadn't been for a very long time. -- With Naruto saying "Sasuke. We are not friends." at the end of chp 2 (and then repeated as a thought in the beginning of chp 3) made this paragraph slightly confusing to me, unless the first bit of bolded text was suppose to read "They weren't friends."


Thats all I can remember catching, so thus ends my mini-Japanese lesson. Again, I'm not not trying to pick at you, I enjoy what you're doing and I think that if I noticed these things others did as well. I'm looking forward to seeing how Naruto and Sasuke's non-relationship will blossom into a piece of yaoi fiction =)

wow! this is very interesting!

I just wanted to say I really like your story. I know it's been a long time since you've updated, but I hope you will continue with it, I think it's very good, I love the plot and would like to read more.^_^

Wow, I'm speechless. I usually avoid stories of Sasuke's return to Konoha, because most of them aren't written very well, but I simply couldn't stay away from this one. The only bad thing I can say about it is that it isn't finished! How could you do that to us, leaving the chapter at such a cliffhanger? I can't wait for the next update.

Wow, what a cliffhanger! I really like that last line and I like how Naruto is dealing with this as neutrally as possible--makes him a better leader. And of course, how could Naruto possibly consider Sasuke a friend? Sasuke was friends with the 12 or 13 year old Naruto he remembers, not the thirty-something year old Rokudaime Hokage. But why is it that "considering [the Uchiha's] case" he won't be punished by death? Are they going to say something like the bloodline needs to continue on so they're going to keep him for breeding purposes? Or are they related to Sasuke's untreated PTSD from the influence of the curse seal and 2 Itachi induced genjutsu's so it's like letting him go by reason of psychological issues? Or just something completely different? Oh well, guess I'll find out soon.

Oh, and great job by the way--there are some minor typos, for example instead of "angels," it's "angles" of the face. I guess if you really want, can go back and fix the typos if you want to polish up the fic a bit. Or, get a beta to do it. Whatever--your story, your call, and just a suggestion on my part. Looking forward to the update. =)

OMG!This is so good. Please update soon!

My biggest fantasy has usually been Naruto Tell Sasuke that He and Sasuke were not longer friends...now that I've actually read someone writing about that... o.O I don't think I'll ever be the same again.

-Damp *o.O*

sounds interesting, please update

i love it :D...and cliffhanger...it's evil, so update soon, ok? hehe and finally a story with naruto as a hokage and a good one nonetheless.