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January 31, 2008 at 12:00 AM
=( ahhw, I really hope you'll find a beta to make things easier for you.
I would do it, but English isn't my native language.
All of your work has been amazing so far and I absolutely love you're writing style.
Good luck finding a beta!
I would do it, but English isn't my native language.
All of your work has been amazing so far and I absolutely love you're writing style.
Good luck finding a beta!
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January 30, 2008 at 12:00 AM
If you're still looking for a Beta: I would love to help you out. I've got all the time in the world. So let me know.
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January 20, 2008 at 12:00 AM
they're all horny bastards all they need is to get layed but theirs a catch...they stick with the same lay now thats love...no thats just gay but sweet.hope kiba and haku dont forget about the dinner because they had to try out their new lover, this plan should go well.hope you can update soon
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January 19, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I really like this fic, I can't wait to see what happens with Suigetsu. Please update soon.
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January 17, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Hey there Darlin'
You made me very curious, so I read your story (not all of it, don't have that kind of time at the moment. Just 1 through 15) I gotta say, you don't have a problem. What's with all this dissin' you story?!
Now allow me to elaborate. You have NO difficulties in the style department. Unconventional?.. Yes. But your writing is fairly clear and well edited enough and you've got style up the frickin' wahzoo! It's damn entertaining! You're hilarious! It's funny, it's hot, it's cute, it's creative and it easily draws the reader in. Now I will admit that the 'direction' seems to have lost some focus (not that this kills the story 'cause obviously I kept reading it) and when I looked over your list of other stories, I happened to note that none of them seems to have a COMPLETE sign on them anywhere. This leads me to think that if you're having trouble (and I still don't call this a problem because it's oh sooo easily fixed and has nothing to do with any kind of lack of talent) it has to do with planning.
I love the flow of your words within each scene/chapter. It's dynamic and it 'works', slang and euphemisms and all! It shows that you're more than capable of that kind of flow on a bigger scale, which in my opinion, is the most important thing. (cause anything else can be worked on but that... you either got it or you don't) You just need to 'direct' that flow and don't lose track of where you were going. If you've found that this is an issue. (I don't like to presume but that was the impression I got from your little rant.) Just take the time, before you let yourself get caught up in details, to get a firm grasp on the bigger picture and don't lose sight of it.
Admittedly, you probably don't need to take it as far as I do. (sheepish grin) I outline the ever-livin'-shit out of everything I write. Point form, scene for scene, right to the end. (Not that it's set in stone)You could just write yourself a summary before you start, but the main thing is the 'end'. You gotta know it and keep heading on that track. Honestly, I know exactly how hard it is to take this time. You get an idea and you're all enthusiastic and you want to jump right in and start getting it out there. But I think that's the reason behind most abandoned fics. You know inspiration hits and runs. It don't stick around. So you gotta make sure you get the license number. lol
Seriously, scene for scene seems like a bit much but it really help to keep me from wandering of on a tangent. (No joke! I could stop mid chapter and ask myself what the HELL I'm doing. I've seen me do it. I'm rambling right now for god sake!) It also helps when you start losing steam. It's a lot easier to push through those chapter that you don't really care about when you at least know almost exactly what to put in them.
Anyway, as I said, it's nothing to worry about and has no bearing on your talent. You do have some 'serious' talent. If I weren't so dead tired right now I'd be going straight back to read the rest of it! You said that it wasn't turning out like you wanted, but I'd say it's definitely still worth finishing. Afterwards you could always do a second version and change anything you like. (Most of my stuff has, or has had at some point, the proverbial version two) =^.^=
TTYL
dagget
luv n kisses!!
You made me very curious, so I read your story (not all of it, don't have that kind of time at the moment. Just 1 through 15) I gotta say, you don't have a problem. What's with all this dissin' you story?!
Now allow me to elaborate. You have NO difficulties in the style department. Unconventional?.. Yes. But your writing is fairly clear and well edited enough and you've got style up the frickin' wahzoo! It's damn entertaining! You're hilarious! It's funny, it's hot, it's cute, it's creative and it easily draws the reader in. Now I will admit that the 'direction' seems to have lost some focus (not that this kills the story 'cause obviously I kept reading it) and when I looked over your list of other stories, I happened to note that none of them seems to have a COMPLETE sign on them anywhere. This leads me to think that if you're having trouble (and I still don't call this a problem because it's oh sooo easily fixed and has nothing to do with any kind of lack of talent) it has to do with planning.
I love the flow of your words within each scene/chapter. It's dynamic and it 'works', slang and euphemisms and all! It shows that you're more than capable of that kind of flow on a bigger scale, which in my opinion, is the most important thing. (cause anything else can be worked on but that... you either got it or you don't) You just need to 'direct' that flow and don't lose track of where you were going. If you've found that this is an issue. (I don't like to presume but that was the impression I got from your little rant.) Just take the time, before you let yourself get caught up in details, to get a firm grasp on the bigger picture and don't lose sight of it.
Admittedly, you probably don't need to take it as far as I do. (sheepish grin) I outline the ever-livin'-shit out of everything I write. Point form, scene for scene, right to the end. (Not that it's set in stone)You could just write yourself a summary before you start, but the main thing is the 'end'. You gotta know it and keep heading on that track. Honestly, I know exactly how hard it is to take this time. You get an idea and you're all enthusiastic and you want to jump right in and start getting it out there. But I think that's the reason behind most abandoned fics. You know inspiration hits and runs. It don't stick around. So you gotta make sure you get the license number. lol
Seriously, scene for scene seems like a bit much but it really help to keep me from wandering of on a tangent. (No joke! I could stop mid chapter and ask myself what the HELL I'm doing. I've seen me do it. I'm rambling right now for god sake!) It also helps when you start losing steam. It's a lot easier to push through those chapter that you don't really care about when you at least know almost exactly what to put in them.
Anyway, as I said, it's nothing to worry about and has no bearing on your talent. You do have some 'serious' talent. If I weren't so dead tired right now I'd be going straight back to read the rest of it! You said that it wasn't turning out like you wanted, but I'd say it's definitely still worth finishing. Afterwards you could always do a second version and change anything you like. (Most of my stuff has, or has had at some point, the proverbial version two) =^.^=
TTYL
dagget
luv n kisses!!
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January 17, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I just read your review for Shawty so low and I felt that I needed to respond. Yes, finally some good constructive criticism; I’ve been waiting for someone to help me figure out what the hell I’m doing wrong. Thanks a bunch for pointing out how I can improve myself. Yes I am fairly new to writing lemons (only written four in a couple of months) and every time I write one it seems off. Don’t get me wrong I’m glad that I’ve gotten some good reviews on them but I’m it’s nice to have someone say hey you can do better because this, this, and this needs fixed. I know this may sound slightly masochistic on my part for saying thanks a bunch but seriously I want to improve and get better at my writing skills. So anyway, I love this fic btw and I’m not sure if I’ve reviewed it yet but great job. I love the interaction between Sasuke and Naruto with a lot of humor to boot. Sorry if this review is a little odd and random but I just woke up @_@. Again thanks for your input.
~cai~
~cai~
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January 15, 2008 at 12:00 AM
OOO IM SO GLAD I FOUND THIS FANFIC AGAIN!!!! YES I LOVE THIS FANFIC!!!! IT IS ONE THE BEST IF NOT IN THE TOP TEN ON THE BEST NARUSASU STORYS EVER!! THIS STORY INSPIRED ME SO MUCH THANK YOU FOR WRITING IT. I LOVE THIS FANFIC!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! IM ON THIS SITE 2 IM NARUSASU422
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January 14, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I got several questions for joo! One where you been I have missed this story! Two like Tommy from the show Martin what the HELL do those do for a living?? No one's gone to work in this entire story. Are they loaded?!?! Dammit I wish I was *cries* and um yea I think my brain just died from that extremely kinky 3-some ooh my butt hurts just from thinking about it *sits on a cushioned donut* Can't wait for the next installment.
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January 14, 2008 at 12:00 AM
oh my fucking god! hawt!
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January 14, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I love it the lemon scene was so hot. I can’t wait to read the next chapter so keep on writing and UPDATE SOON.