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by ladygizarme

schedule September 12, 2007 at 12:00 AM
*whistles softly* I'm impressed! I was surprised this doesn't have more reviews, but I thought about it and maybe people are turned off by the Naruto-is-biologically female part? I was a little doubtful at first - Im not fond of fics that actually make him a girl - but instead I think you've drawn out the transgender themes beautifully. I have a couple of FtM friends and I'm positive they'd appreciate your recognition of the actual gender. Still, some might assume you're going to over-ukify him...Maybe you could make a AN early on to emphasize that while Naruto has a female body, he's male in every other way?

Anyway, I love the fic and you're an awesome writer. Thanks!
schedule September 12, 2007 at 12:00 AM
yay new chapter!! i'm totally loving this, and i hope to see more, but don't over-strech yourself. i'm really happy with their gaurdians, because kakaxiru really is WAY overdone. i looked at the layout of the apartment before i started reading, and was like 'noooooo! i just spoiled it!!!!' but it was okay. and sasu-chan's so dumb, i love it. and i like the sasoxita too! i haven't seen any of that before!
i like the detail, maybe not the specific shoe... i don't know what the word is. brand? because, just reading it, i don't really understand. though after thinking about it later, i realized i own black converse hightops. that was sweet.
anyway, the description of oto was a little slow while reading it, but when i finished i felt it was right. it was showing the city. a movie would do the same thing, while we listen to the basketball and skateboards, only much faster. like in eight seconds instead of a page. but that's okay! when i was done, i liked it that way!
great chapter, i really love this story, and i can't wait to see what itachi says/does to sasuke to figure out what's going on.~
schedule September 7, 2007 at 12:00 AM
so yeah... i forgot that i hadnt even reviewed the first chap...i read it, but totally didnt put my review in writing. I LOVE IT

i really dont get into xdressing, but i really think this is cute. i am going to read chapter 2 now, cause i want to *ahem*

love love, kiss kiss.
^__^
-sk
schedule September 7, 2007 at 12:00 AM
duuuuuuuuuudeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee-
i loved this chapter....i loved your description of the shoes and the clothes, and of Sasuke primping and saying he wasnt primping :P and Kimi's "posse" i love that the twins are skaters.. KAWAII

my FAVORITE part in this chapter.....was "if you think (or speak) of the devil, he will surely make his presence known" Enter:Itachi mwahahahaha i love it i love it!!!!

and the sasuke/mouthwash part was hilarious! woooot for you and this chapter. i cant wait to see what you do with the next one....yes i already know who the guardians are...but i wont tell :P

and to jpop- he is indeed still gay. :P i have to agree that i really cant see Kimi wearing b-ball shoes...at all...Adidas are alright though, i guess....as long as they are uber bitchin. hehehehe i was reading all the shoe descriptions trying to remember which ones were which hehehe it was like a puzzle ne? Memory game.

much love sista. try to get another chap out quick, although i know with Chibi-chan (squared) it is kinda hard.
-sk
-sk
schedule September 3, 2007 at 12:00 AM
this is looking really good, and i can't wait to see what sasuke forgot. i think naru's gaurdians are kakashi and iruka, although something different would be cool, because they're used so often. i loved the kimixsasu scene, and the purging scene almost made me feel sick. i probably shouldn't have read it, but oh well. it was all great, i really like naru-chan's girl name, and i can't wait to see the next chapter. but, it is 4:30 in the morning now, and i have things to do, so i SHOULD be going off to bed. i bet i won't though. i shoulda just let my sis turn the computor off at 2.~
schedule August 29, 2007 at 12:00 AM
i AM awed by his sage-like prowess. that is awesome. anyway, can't wait for the next chapter!!! ^^~