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September 15, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Original idea^^ I love this fic!
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September 14, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Quite an original story is not it? The reviews suited the characters - though I would expect more coherent stuff from a girl with an intelligence Sakura is said to own. And in fact I would like to read more, for example with some excerpts from Sasuke's infamous story (honestly to always make a delay after the 9th chapter and his readers do not realise this circumstance yet...).
Still, from your profile information I believe the "Redjutsu" nickname to hide Naruto, since it seems to be your OTP - the NarutoxSasuke relation, but honestly do you truly think Naruto would ever write that way? Even use words like "thesaurus", try to be psychologically critical and such?
Instead I had to expect it to be Itachi himself to wield such a writing style. As a measure to brainwash/manipulate Sasuke somewhat... and in the end effect to alter the condition the "brotherly" relationship is in. For the flaws of the story are sure enough linked to the flaws of the author himself - in the end we write ourselfs to a degree, do not we? And Sasuke seems to have a problem in understanding a value of relationship and the true closeness... To make the boy insecure and in need of comfort would be a stage one, to make him rethink his wishes and values the second and probably get the remedy for both Sasuke and the relationship - the third. From this point of view I see Itachi to be the one acting behind the "flame" (also comparable to constructive criticism in this case), in fact he has gained some profit already. From this perspective I see a longer discussion between the brothers - the anonymous one online, the direct one in the "real life" to be held parallel and eventually the progress to be shown in both Sasuke's life and excerpts from the daring "online story"... Would not it be an interesting story to read?
I believe I have tried my best to convince you into continue, ItaSasu and modify a few sentences from the chapter one. Anyway I wish you luck with this story.
With regards, Hikari.
Still, from your profile information I believe the "Redjutsu" nickname to hide Naruto, since it seems to be your OTP - the NarutoxSasuke relation, but honestly do you truly think Naruto would ever write that way? Even use words like "thesaurus", try to be psychologically critical and such?
Instead I had to expect it to be Itachi himself to wield such a writing style. As a measure to brainwash/manipulate Sasuke somewhat... and in the end effect to alter the condition the "brotherly" relationship is in. For the flaws of the story are sure enough linked to the flaws of the author himself - in the end we write ourselfs to a degree, do not we? And Sasuke seems to have a problem in understanding a value of relationship and the true closeness... To make the boy insecure and in need of comfort would be a stage one, to make him rethink his wishes and values the second and probably get the remedy for both Sasuke and the relationship - the third. From this point of view I see Itachi to be the one acting behind the "flame" (also comparable to constructive criticism in this case), in fact he has gained some profit already. From this perspective I see a longer discussion between the brothers - the anonymous one online, the direct one in the "real life" to be held parallel and eventually the progress to be shown in both Sasuke's life and excerpts from the daring "online story"... Would not it be an interesting story to read?
I believe I have tried my best to convince you into continue, ItaSasu and modify a few sentences from the chapter one. Anyway I wish you luck with this story.
With regards, Hikari.
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September 13, 2007 at 12:00 AM
This is awesome! I loved it! And that flame--it was perfect. I could so imagine reading one like that! lol.
And the reviews were hilarious! I too use 'OMG' too much and the all famous 'XD'. lol.( I also use 'lol' too much). ^_^;
Great story! I loved this one-shot!!!
-niiro-chan
And the reviews were hilarious! I too use 'OMG' too much and the all famous 'XD'. lol.( I also use 'lol' too much). ^_^;
Great story! I loved this one-shot!!!
-niiro-chan
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September 13, 2007 at 12:00 AM
hmm. this was interesting, and pretty good. i liked the idea of sasuke posting dirty stories. i do wonder who flamed him... but, oh well. great fic!~
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September 13, 2007 at 12:00 AM
No flames from me, that was an excellent oneshot! I have to say that the creativity of it was great. A lot of it rang true to me, as an author who loves reviews and hates flames.
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September 13, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Nice. More please.
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September 13, 2007 at 12:00 AM
..oh noo... when I read it before there was a questionmark behind the End...... you changed the name of the flamer as well....
...anyways I really like it and would love to read another chapter....^-^ô
...anyways I really like it and would love to read another chapter....^-^ô
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September 13, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Don't worry, I;m not going to flame you. Why would I when this fic was so awesome!
You should continue, I wanna know who left that flame and how Sasuke is going to get revenge on that person.
Great story! :)
You should continue, I wanna know who left that flame and how Sasuke is going to get revenge on that person.
Great story! :)
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September 13, 2007 at 12:00 AM
To:
Mademoiselle_LaCroix....
Haha, yeah. I did change it. ( I sort of felt that the name didn't work as well if I was going to leave it a one-shot... but with Red_Jutsu, it can work either way...plus if I do continue, I have an idea for it now.)
You liked it better the other way though?
And, don't worry sweetie, I still might write more. ^^
Mademoiselle_LaCroix....
Haha, yeah. I did change it. ( I sort of felt that the name didn't work as well if I was going to leave it a one-shot... but with Red_Jutsu, it can work either way...plus if I do continue, I have an idea for it now.)
You liked it better the other way though?
And, don't worry sweetie, I still might write more. ^^
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September 13, 2007 at 12:00 AM
LOL I have a feeling that it was his brother that did the flame.