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for Personal Trainer

by Hen

person anon
schedule October 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
wah!!! this was well written with lovely descriptions/details, and nice run through of the plot. so happy to see no glaring mistakes in grammar! it looks so promising. this was also a terrible cliffhanger! i hope that there is an update very soon! thanks for sharing your work and i look forward to the next chapter!
schedule October 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Mmm. Nummy.
I confess, I was kind of skeptical that this was going to be any good, because I've seen similar situations to this done, and they didn't turn out that great, but you've done a great job so far, I'm really pleased. :D
Hee hee hee, Tsunade as a madam really fits, and I liked Shizune and Genma's positions and characters. ^^ I look forward to that sexy, lazy ass Kakashi finally showing up!
person Inigeshi
schedule October 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
ooh you've struck gold here i am pleased to tell you that i am now a fan-girl. i love the concept i love iruka and your writing stile is a refreshing change from some people who seem to be completely illiterate. i mean my spelling isn't the best but hey i can write a sentence. grreat job and pleas continue.
person Julissis
schedule October 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Ohh... i like your story so far. ^^ Though i was a bit dissapointed when your first chapter ended and there wasn't a "next one" to read on and on.. ^^
I really hope you will add genma to later chapters. ^_^ He's so cool. And i'm really curious how kakashi will begin irukas training.
person Spindy
schedule October 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Loved your story! XD can't wait for updates!!!
person tovah
schedule October 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
This is really good! I am looking forward to more chapters, please don't disappoint me. It would make me cry and you wouldn't want that on your conscience, would you?
person Vex
schedule October 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I'm not sure if I feel bad or happy for Iruka.
I hope he doesn't have too hard a time...
Unless it hot, then make it difficult! ;)
person Word_Slave
schedule October 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Okay... Where's the next chapter....(taps foot. You're awfully good at this cliffie thing....) Um more please
Slave
schedule October 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
*Is hooked* Looking forward to the next chapter ^_^
person Akaatje
schedule October 24, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Really an interesting story to read. I liked it a lot ^^